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    Your Intro 2 GangstaRAPPER

    Yo, this is a song I wrote, just to show you guys where I'm at as far as the rap game goes. This is it:

    Yo, I'm writing rhymes like 4 times a day,
    in order to express what I wanna say,
    I'm rappin' for those kids in suburbia,
    who never got no where in the rap game,
    I'm trying to make it big all the way to the crib,
    Without spittin' rhymes that are too lame.

    If you need me, I don't mean to be rude,
    but more likely than not, I'll be with some other dude,
    no, not sucking cock, but close enough,
    I'll be battling him out in thick and tough,
    until I come out victorious, oh, how glorious,
    no one will be able to reach me when I'm at the top,
    you guys will be grabbin' at my dick like it's mop,
    so go ahead, motherfuckers, and wipe up your shit,
    makin' fun of all y'all cause I'm really, really lit.

  2. #2
    DrFunkMD
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    Dayamn son. You kickin beats like Mia Hamm!
    I'm diggin it brah. Keep this shit up.

  3. #3
    Yo, thanks a lot, bro. Straight up, you my homie.

    Any1 else?
    SPITTIN' THE ILLEST SHIZ SINCE '69 (hehe, get it? 69)

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    Thought this was alright. The flow was good. The topic was simple, post some pieces that you go in depth with. Think up some creative topics you can write about.

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    Aight son, or shall I say grown MAN?!

    ...Get it?

    I'll get workin' on new rhymes, stat.

    Keep the comments coming!
    SPITTIN' THE ILLEST SHIZ SINCE '69 (hehe, get it? 69)

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    good drop homie

    basically only thing you need to work on is punchlines and rhyming concept

    overall good drop homie,i like the first verse,i like your flow and your structure straight out!!

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    Nation
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    that was ill, couldve had better structure and reworded some shit but ill, keep droppin homie n elevate

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    Aight, thanks Red_. Word to your cuz. hollA BACK!
    SPITTIN' THE ILLEST SHIZ SINCE '69 (hehe, get it? 69)

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    Quote Originally Posted by Nation
    that was ill, couldve had better structure and reworded some shit but ill, keep droppin homie n elevate
    Smashin' homie nikka. Word to the bras when they weep in the hood, mofo.
    SPITTIN' THE ILLEST SHIZ SINCE '69 (hehe, get it? 69)

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    Creepin Disciple
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    dat was raw cuz....keep droppin n doin yo thang in all i would say 9/10

    PEACE...........check it

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=172081
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=172073

  11. #11
    I really think you've got a great flow
    Keep up the good work homie!

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    Jay-Rell
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    dat was hot
    wut more can i say??

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    You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that youleft decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

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