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Thread: presenting: cptn. HOOK

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    presenting: cptn. HOOK

    its all insanity and even through my vanity
    i can see that you aint a big fan of me or what i wrote
    or the arsenal i tote, though they not made of steel
    i still hold the big guns with the scope
    and when i zoom in your doomed friend
    because i will soon end your era
    i rain terror my reign devoid of error
    fuck zues and hera i got much fairer
    and rarer women on my list
    rule with an iron fist
    i subsist on a diet that consists
    of lyrics and words i am rather verbose
    rhyme boast hardcore like rambo i'd like to toast
    to the politicians up in they penthouse
    im just biding my time preparing to douse
    em with kerosine now lets see how pristine
    they seem


    i distill and as a fine wine i will only get better with time
    its a dime in my pocket and a blunt in the other
    get so smoked out i look wigged out like i was sally struthers
    but be peaceful brothers the time aint come yet
    so forget for now what i said about runnin on the set
    and never let the man confiscate your contraband
    just cuz he dont understand...
    that we live to get high
    live to get by motherfucker try to jack shit
    prays not to die but my fire good for the buy
    fuckin two for the dime
    ever since i was little i been obsessed with fat stacks
    and fat sacks gats with the hammer cocked back
    nickle on the mac hatchet axe to the back
    getcha like the sickle cell gettin blacks
    punches flyin at the speed of light that stop you in your tracks
    "And when it comes to gettin' nookie I'm not a rookie I got girls that make that hoe Toni Braxton look like Whoopie"




    RIP :: BIG L

  2. #2
    MythDirection
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    this seemed more like a poem then anything your structure was all over the place kinda like you just freestyled it a bit i also find it mostly typical violence issues that are running through this

    "and never let the man confiscate your contraband
    just cuz he dont understand...
    that we live to get high
    live to get by motherfucker try to jack shit
    prays not to die but my fire good for the buy
    fuckin two for the dime"

    this part seemed to run smoothly

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    You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

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