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    Fate

    Bold lines:Ghetto_Fabolous
    Slanted:Tha-Joka



    chorus:
    I love my moms, protect her wit my life
    kill a nigga,just so shell live tonight
    I'll go to lengths, no one will hurt her
    someone wanna shoot her,for revenge ill go even further
    He took my moms heart and tryna trash it
    Shit he get close..his life I'll smash it
    A lesson he'll learn, my moms not to be taken for granted
    I'll stick a knife in his...and have his smile slanted


    *Ghetto_Fabolous*
    Door slammed, i went out to c moms in tears
    She said her n her man arguin over they careers
    I asked her y she cryin, and she told me da threat
    That nigga told her that if she went for a job she'd meet death
    Anger hit me quickly, i ran to c where da bitch be
    He was outside, so i ran up n cut him swiftly
    Left him layin by his truck in a pool of blood
    Thats what happens when a bitch nigga threatens my mom


    chorus:
    I love my moms, protect her wit my life
    kill a nigga,just so shell live tonight
    I'll go to lengths, no one will hurt her
    someone wanna shoot her,for revenge ill go even further
    He took my moms heart and tryna trash it
    Shit he get close..his life I'll smash it
    A lesson he'll learn, my moms not to be taken for granted
    I'll stick a knife in his...and have his smile slanted

    *Tha-Joka*
    The sound a woman scream,It's my Mom..or thats what it seems
    Shit..that nigga is trying to be her killa,My life to end next..not now i tell her
    Neither one of us shall become deceased,Obituaries wont have me leased
    For sign in's and out's my life is to be longer,But he's stronger
    So what can I do but go and get tha gun,Blast em for life..not fun
    I turn around he's standing at my door,A second later he's on the floor
    My glock went off..from the barrel to his heart,His world..has fell apart
    I run to check on my mom shes not dead,But unconciouc from a blow to tha head
    He breathes one last time then is gone,God forgive me for I was wrong
    But he deserved it for fuckin wit my mom shes all I have
    And the fact she's still alive because of me..makes me glad

    Thanks:
    Thank You God.
    Thank you to Ghetto_Fabolous...for all his help on the chorus and lending his verse I'm truly thankful for that.
    Last edited by FallenAngel; February 13th, 2005 at 08:54 PM
    Life Is 10% What Happens To You;
    90% How You React To It.

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    yo another good flow from u, very organized, didnt stray off at all, str8 fire mang

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    GhettoFabolous
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    Ayo dogg, it was a pleasure collabin wit u.

    Ur verse was tyte homie.

    Thanks for da feed Nation.

    Uppin for some more feedback.

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    Thanx fa real man uppin fa more feed
    Life Is 10% What Happens To You;
    90% How You React To It.

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    shit i liked it good job fellaz

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    i liked it aswell
    good shit yo

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    Damn no one gives good feedback anymore huh. Well its good to see another B/O Collab.....but i dont think this was long enough........it seemed to me that this subject needed to have a longer verse from each of you to make the emotion really come out. I have very strong feelings toward my moms so i woulda been able to write pages about this topic.......so to me it sounded too short.........but even though the verses were short the flow was on point along with the vocab and description coulda been better............overall i liked the topic chorus was str8 the verses stayed with the topic neither of you went off.....so that showed consistancy..........just wanted to read more i guess..............stay up joka and fab.

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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=170515
    I forgot this....could both of you look at this open mic^^^^

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