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    Arrow New York will be Forever

    Rip is the New York logo for the Twin conspiracy
    A terrorist threat that left thousands in misery
    Seriously, I feel for the dead killed in the attack
    Have a picture of the Twins on a plaque in the back
    We are making no retaleation, and thats a fact
    Afganestan is the Country Bush, Not Iraq
    Our leader is lacking the consent of his nation
    This is democracy bitch, not a dictation
    Re-visit the remancipation proclamation
    And listen to the people on this acasion
    Another 4 years of hell, is what we're facin
    He gonna start drafting, and for the next invasion

    New York City is and always will be the greatest city
    An attack on its Twin Towers, left many in pity
    Manly those who lost the love ones in the act
    Away New Yorkers now wanting to go back

    The city is like a wonder, the world was given
    Like a little slice of central ville heaven
    Theres only 5 burrows, but in heaven there seven
    I wish I could get one more look at them towers
    But I was in school when I saw the second go in showers
    Of debris and people falling, its been going on for hours
    I wish I could I was giving, time traveling Powers
    But whats done is done and New York still great
    I think it was just God's sign of fate
    Or the Pres. has to much shit on his plate
    Thinking about his plans, makes me stay up late
    And makes my New York born heart, full of hate
    He blew it off when he was readin My Pet Goat
    This is what the paper should of wrote
    President, get off ur ass and do something fast
    Dont be an ass and ignore it for some 1st grade class
    People dying, thousands going up in flames in smoke
    While he sits in the classroom, maybe sipping some coke
    Then the mind of my eyes was a woke
    By a the window behind that just broke
    A plane staring me right in the face
    THen explode and took me, with the rest of the place

    R.I.P. victims of this terrorist act...God help the families

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    weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee eeeeee

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    another piece about 9/11, **yawn**. nothing stood out for me here, thge vocab was basic, the jabs at bush were standard stuff, i didn't see any multi's or strong imagery. i think you'd do a lot better with a more original topic. you did have a good sense of pace though, keep your strengths and work on your weaknesses man.

    keep posting.

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