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Last edited by p O e T i Q u E; August 3rd, 2008 at 10:36 AM
This was an okay piece I like how you are sticking up for the guys on this one. But yeah if it was a little bit longer and a little more complex it would have been better. Work on your vocab.
this was wack as shit your garbage
Sick thoughts. Thank you, I love the way you can't tell me how wack it is but yet can't tell me why...And you've told other people THA JOKA(my man) the same thing. it's funny, but it's you opinion keep Hatin you pushin me forward
yea this was an ok piece nothin special really.........you need to be a little more creative and complex, fix ya structure a little bit but over all this was an aight drop the topic was pretty coo.......
Im not awar of the big beef thats goin on with this piece, but IMO it wasnt very good.
im gonna ignore the structure because, well yeh it is an OM, but its not really anything special just a diss.
Now i think your wordplay was too simple, try using ways to get too words, not just have a word like bitch and just goin straight there.
Your punches were simple too, I think you didnt express enough.
Overall, i think this piece was generally a bad piece, a few bits i liked but nothing at all special.
In all honesty, i dont think you should of posted this...
Check my latest drop tho
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=168569
thanks
situation is the gurl dont know me but she come to mah house at 12 oclock and jumped me in my front yard wit 3 other gurls she looks like ahorse an dthat's all i got to say i prolly shouldnt have but i hope she sees it so i did
.............So something happend in real-life, and you're usin net-beef?
Thats pretty pathetic girl, if i wer you Id try to get too her sumwer where it will actually hurt her, not calling her a bitch online.
Didnt i say i hope she see it? damn she on here and i done hurt that broad okay? so let me deal wit whats pathetic and whats not
well, you said that you were angry, and that shows in the writing... but i dunno, dont you think she might just make a thread with your name in it and a diss rap too? might as well just meet in person again and fight with say.... boxing headgear and tennis rackets... or maybe jousting on bicycles?
if i were you, i would just forget about it. this might make you feel a bit better for now, but you might regret it later. and uh... you dont go out the front door when there's a group of peeps outside waiting to jump you... you grab the twelve gauge and head out the side door and run them off your property.
by the way, why did she come to your house to fight you?
I aint run out the door like I was Krazy I was coming from the backyard, feeding my dogs. SHe jumped me b/c the gurl i was chillin wit she aint like. And cuz the broad was lookin at me all i asked was if she had a problem. She fake. I really just wanted to get it off of my chest.
You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.
Sick Thoughtz...Fuck You...this wasnt whack. If you are going to say its whack then tell why and ways to improve and for that Your piece will be closed. Asshole.
Decent piece by the way...Keep posting and Im sure you will get better
and Please dont turn this into a discussion thread or i will have to close it.
But get the links please
It was an ok peice. Sounded real, full of emotion...
Funny at parts. But I would suggest just reading alot of OM's and you'll
see who's scripts you like, and then try and fall into a more even patteren.
Thanks for the feedback on my OM.
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