Its called Criticism

[Ndustrial Minded]

criticism is on the rise and is raisin depression
everyone does it....most of them don't make the confession
they get pissed at themselves and just explode
then when they're done they stop to reload

people who are criticized against are then depressed
start gettin paranoid....and then they get stressed
their life revolves around these assholes
poppin up like moles...under every bridge like troles

turn around and they're in your face...staring
you stand there...don't know what to do..glaring
you become weak in the knees and fall
you look up and there all 100 feet tall

Hit this up with feed yo

[Ndustrial Minded]

yo hit this up!!

[MC.EDICIT]

"people who are criticized against are then depressed
start gettin paranoid....and then they get stressed
their life revolves around these assholes
poppin up like moles...under every bridge like troles"

Yo this shit's great, I like U'r style and topic.
I almost chose that avatar my self. click above my avatar on my name
and peep my Raged flow, posted on open mic. PEACE

[Novacain]

Be patient with your replies... Dont post again uppin it abt 10 minutes afta u posted it originally

And i wasnt feeling this, it was a little simple and the flow was basic and off

keep droppin and try get the point across next time

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=167239
Hit that up for me son, peace

Oh, and get your links up here... before Credz closes this... He does that yano...

ANDDDDDDDDDD he's gone global!

[noncentz]

this was not great but not wack you need complexity and to use creative word combos and line combos

[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

[Ndustrial Minded]

aight i'll get them for both mine soon....don't close til late tonight please man...

[LM]

This was average...

You need to come more complex, your lines were to simple in most cases. Your flow was ok, but add some multies and internals. Topic was a'ight but you need to elevate.

Keep droppin

[Genetic Carnage]

Very average, there was not much of a flow. You did however use words to bring your point across, I will give you credit for that. 7/10

[warchild]

this was too short to give loads of feed.
the structure was ok the flow was average, the topic was good but i think you could of wrote a bit more about it.

return the favour.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=167404

[Ndustrial Minded]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...87#post2014287
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...94#post2014294
my links to keep this alive

[CelticOne]

doin this as a favor for feed on my piece..it was pretty average shit man. the rhymes could have been pulled off in a freestyle, much less a keystyle. i like the topic cause i have had my fair share of experience with it but there was a whole lot more you could have done with it. keep workin, up ya game a bit and youll get ya respect

[TheReinvention]

Pretty tight, I was feeling it. I would recommend making it a bit longer, cause it only took me 15-20 seconds. Good job though, you just need to work on Multies, and Vocab. Overall 8/10

[TheReinvention]

By the way, hits this open mic up for me bro.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...67#post2014367

[=YaZ=]

This waz tight, good caption of the topik. It's like u put yourself in the person an wrote about wat they feel. i'd give this a 9/10.... keep droppen hott (\1/) Holla!