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  1. January 16th, 2005, 04:25 PM #1
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    ..Glass Figurine..

    A bond about to break....
    ....2 souls test the patience of fate
    Each carrying a weight...
    ....A heavy burden, much heartache

    My Glass Figurine so keen pure n’ so clean...
    Only fifteen but she’s what I think of when I dream...
    She’s been, hurt before but now with me not anymore...
    Our feelings soar & I adore her more than anything before...
    ...Four months...
    122 days of ecstasy, she’s classy & only has eyes for me...
    A hopeless MC ridin’ wit a girl unreal, jus a fish in the sea...
    One of thousands but she chose me...why? She doesn’t reply...
    Embarrassed? I look to the sky, why me? An ordinary guy...
    An illusion? But I’m never high; I sigh & think of her again...
    The pain when we’re apart & my heart can’t hold or contain...
    The feelings I express are so insane not feign but so real...
    I feel so real I act so real but what’s the appeal? Is it really real?
    ...So surreal...

    A bond about to break....
    ....2 souls test the patience of fate
    Each carrying a weight...
    ....A heavy burden, much heartache

    My Glass Figurine is a beautiful gene n’ a royal queen...
    Sittin on a throne so clean she gleans, eyes serene...
    Many are green with envy jealous of me a hopeless MC...
    One fish in the sea – is this the way my life is to be...?
    Each day is ecstasy, a pleasure drug filling my head wit love...
    ...One hug one kiss...
    ...Heaven exists...
    ...I can’t resist...
    ...Bliss with a twist

    A bond about to break....
    ....2 souls test the patience of fate
    Each carrying a weight...
    ....A heavy burden, much heartache
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  2. January 16th, 2005, 04:42 PM #2
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  3. January 16th, 2005, 04:47 PM #3
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    Not a bad piece, i was hoping to read alot more but it didnt happen. It seems like the ending was a bit rushed, or maybe it was jsut me. The flow couldnt of got any better, that was prolly your strong point. I felt that you needed to go about the topic a little better tho, seems like bits and pieces of it were missing, but thats only for u to dictate. Overall, a pretty decent drop, hope to see more, peace.
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  4. January 17th, 2005, 07:32 PM #4
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    yeah, can u return the favor on my piece please?
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=166009
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  5. January 17th, 2005, 08:24 PM #5
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    nice overall metaphore and good flow, structure, description, the only thing that i didnt like was that your words were deep but the piece wasnt long enuff to completley express yourself on this topic
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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=165915
    ^^^hit this up
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