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Thread: Tears 2 God(Written shit 4 my album)

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    Tears 2 God(Written shit 4 my album)

    Have you ever cried to god in vain
    To get rid of all of your emotions and pain
    Blood From Ya brain is tears dropping from the rain
    Been through lots of struggles like Dope and Cocaine
    But you must maintain ya composure
    But keep ya head up son, cuz you a soldier
    People make fun of you then that attain exposure
    But you look up to god and smile as you and him seem to get closer
    Always seem like somethin' is tryna pull you away
    And ya main nigga wants to kill you and starts to betray
    But its hard to explain, as ya skull is like an liquid crainium display
    But cryin 2 god is a good way to
    Get rid of all of your pain and not start a whole new life in replay



    I wrote this for a group album, im making so.....i wrote this and we're recording it tomorrow

    Tell me how this is!

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    vivd emmotional to an extent content could be better but didnt really lack so this was a nice reAD make it longer though this was way to short.
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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    Thanks, uppin

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    Def. a good, deep track to put on. You should make another verse for it, I liked where it was going, and the song will need it to be longer.

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    sorry bro... wasnt feelin this... try not to rhyme more then 2 lines worth... it jus sounds really stretched.... there was a good message here tho... N you got it through which is basically the point in OM's i believe... just work on your rhyming scheme

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    I was feeling this, a little short and didnt really like the last line, but it was good.

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    Butch Casady
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    PROS - nice flow to this drop. had a little vocab & was an enjoyable read...

    CONS - very short passage. you should make this a little longer.

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    Thanks everybody, i would love more replies on this!

    Thanks!

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