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Thread: You can't take what is MINE

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    *DUO*
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    You can't take what is MINE

    Everything that I am and never will see
    Is nothing that I was, nor ever will be
    I am that I am and think, therefore I am
    I walk, therefore I stand, and step because I can
    There is nothing in this world that I can not do
    Nor a diamond in the sky that I can not choose
    You tell me no, I say yes, you tell me dont, I say do
    You tell me wont, I say try, you tell me lies, I stay true
    They tell us stop, I say go, they tell us drop, I say hold
    They tell us die, I say grow, they tell us think, I say know
    You can teach me every lesson, and you can preach me all psalms
    You can reach me with a message, and you can keep me in palms
    But any time you try to tell me that I cant or I wont
    I'll prove everyone of you wrong, by everything that Ive wrote
    And everything that Ive done and everything that Ive seen
    Everytime that Ive come, and everytime that Ive dreamed
    You wont hold me down or keep me back from my path
    Thats why they say its MY life, and its MY soul, it's MY task...

    my words, my rhythm, my lyrics, my voice
    my lesson, my legend, my sin, my choice
    my life, my story, my future, my dream
    my family, my father, my mother, my team
    my hate, my love, my fate, my fear
    my faith, my gain, my pain, my tears
    my brother, my keeper, my freind, my foe
    my seed, my reeper, my end, my soul

    They say that you can be anything that you want
    Until the day we grow up, then they just tell you youre not
    They fill us up with these thoughts that they later will crush
    They never think of the cost of what they tell you means much
    That every time that they say that you can, but soon dont
    And everytime that we plan for the life they say wont
    The build us up to go down, they tell us right but then left
    They tell us smile, dont frown, but dont get hopes up, regret
    And its no wonder these kids dont wanna play be the rules
    Theyre so confused by it all, so they go shoot up their schools
    It's like theyre sick of the bullshit, that we adults put em through
    Though we were once at that age, we cant conceive what they prove
    They prove to us that we're wrong, they prove to us that theyre lost
    They prove that we are the problem, they prove that we can not solve
    And they have proved to us all what they can and cant do
    They proved that we have evolved, by all the lies theyve consumed
    I once believed in their words, of how they said I wont last
    Of how they said I cant make it, that's where theyre wrong, it's MY past...

    my words, my rhythm, my lyrics, my voice
    my lesson, my legend, my sin, my choice
    my life, my story, my future, my dream
    my family, my father, my mother, my team
    my hate, my love, my fate, my fear
    my faith, my gain, my pain, my tears
    my brother, my keeper, my freind, my foe
    my seed, my reeper, my end, my soul

    And in conclusion to this, I hope you all may now see
    That all the things that they tell you that you cant, you can be
    They want to hold you back from the line where they failed
    That doesnt mean that youre doomed to fall, in time, where they fell
    It only means that there's tests along this road that we take
    And every step that we make may hit a stone, and we break
    But thats why we get up again, and dust off all the pain
    Sometimes we must take a hand to help us up from the shame
    But that doesnt mean quit, and it doesnt mean cry
    It only means that we've tripped, it doesnt mean we cant climb
    It doesnt mean that theyre right, it doesnt mean you were wrong
    It doesnt mean that this life isnt worth living at all
    It just means that youre strong, to carry on and have hope
    You gotta keep your chin up, pull an Ali rope a dope
    Look all your foes in the eye as they doubt you and smile
    And scream at them "This is MINE! to have it's worth all the while"

    my words, my rhythm, my lyrics, my voice
    my lesson, my legend, my sin, my choice
    my life, my story, my future, my dream
    my family, my father, my mother, my team
    my hate, my love, my fate, my fear
    my faith, my gain, my pain, my tears
    my brother, my keeper, my freind, my foe
    my seed, my reeper, my end, my soul
    Last edited by *DUO*; December 30th, 2004 at 11:40 PM

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    *DUO*
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    btw
    plz help me get this closed already
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...01#post1948501

  3. #3
    *DUO*
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    uppin for opinions....

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    This was pretty tight I thot...the content of it made up for any simple rhyming standard that might be critisized...hook was doooope- u made that fit nice- very nice drop
    Backstabbing,conniving n stealing, put knives in ur ceiling n risk lives to describe how im feeling, demise lies that deprive all ur healing,think i give a fuck ur in a wheel chair trying to derive how ur wheeling?

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    Math0s
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    that was pretty is, i liked the structure, and the amount you wrote on the subject, i like the hooks and the amount of emotion wuz nice which u used. keep on writing.

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    i was really likin that.

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    *DUO*
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    thanks guys.....I really appreciate having feedback on this...I like it a lot more than the majority of stuff Ive written. Because its MINE. lol

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    yea I felt this was a very personal drop plus u stayed consistent on that repetitve thingy...that made this drop special...u really did good on this dog...pz
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  10. #10
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    thanks berbest....nuthin' but love....

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    Yo hot drop dogg...everything was good...keep it up dogg

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    tOngueLasHing
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    yo this shit was hott man
    tight spits and im feelin the chorus
    big ups keep doin wat u doin son 1

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    ILL......what more can you say..

    Keep it bangin like dat!

    $Tha E$
    "Never will I stop being//
    dat ni66a who I be!//
    Get used to it cocksuckaz//
    cause ain't no changin' me//
    U living dangerously, on the edge,
    and I'll push ya//
    hope you fall so that you can look up!"


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    krazee
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    this shit was fresh...i liked how you made every possible point to make it yours..lol no dout it has to be, you told me so...i liked how the flow was non stop and the hook was nice...would be nice to hear in audio...keep it up



    pce

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    *DUO*
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    thanx yal, if you like it enough nominate it for open mics top 10 for jan 05

    thanx again

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