Demon's Deed

[Thrust]

shall i proceed
with the demon's deed in my wrath
it belittles me
another burdon walks my path
how i could ever last
my heart strives but weakness disagrees
some assistance sir, please
i'm broken sheltered in a body cast

an outcast in all reality
treated fair but actually
i'd never dare
another day to be spared
holes in my underwear
though whole on the outside
my franticness roams about
drifting far back into my past life
with some matches and a flashlight
a glimpse of a glare catches sight
until today, becomes tonight
dispite what's right
i continue on my deadly desires
tunes of a mellowing melody
relieves my suffring
as i am slave in the devil's empire
spitting some sin fire
the words of evil discharge my mouth
i'm like a human puppet
controlled by satan himself
so here i am now
present but i'm not seen by the naked eye
i'm just some ghostly figure
loved ones don't notice and pass by
i'm unreconized
my entire identity is overtaken
get my head out of this 6 feet of dirt
may heaven be the place
where i'm cleansed from hurt
though it's not where i'll end
plagued with the demon's deed again

shall i proceed
with the demon's deed in my wrath
it belittles me
another burdon walks my path
how i could ever last
my heart strives but weakness disagrees
some assistance sir, please
i'm broken sheltered in a body cast

[Kill.]

yo man i liked it though i cant relate to it it was still good keep it up
hit me back @ http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=162356

[Thrust]

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=162377
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=162008

[CrazyCarl]

That was nice. Stuff about the devil always sounds deep. I was feelin it. Check mine out.

[Thrust]

some decent feedback please.

[jizza]

it was aight, it was hard to get the flow down, but you had good content and i felt that the imagery was good too. Like I said, you may wanna try and make it easier to follow the flow but nothin else really seems to wron. I would like to hear these lyrics on a beat with some deep bass.

[Thrust]

up.

[TRUTHBETOLD_103]

Yo I Felt That . It Was Hot This Truthbetold Come Show A New Member Some Luz An Checc My Shit Out ... 1

[warchild]

the content and vocab was hot, the structure and the flow was average but all together it was tight.
hit up my last post.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=162952

[Thrust]

thanks for the replies.