E.L. Webb v.s. Anomaly

[Anomaly]

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[Anomaly]

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[Mr. Key]

This is was a pretty lame battle, but Anomaly wins for havin a harder hittin verse, it was wack how u spent the whole verse comin at his sig, but it was better than anything E.L webb had. Web had better structure cause anomalies was hella stretched, but thats all he had goin for his verse, and u need punches to win battles, being that anomally actually had punches and personals, he takes the win, RETURN THE FAVA IN THE BATTLE IN MY SIG

[Richard Parker]

I'm only here to help make you better - so don't take the massive amount of criticism the wrong way, i do it with everyone. Just pay attention & use it to help urself come better next time.

Webb you must be a real geek havin a comic book as a signature
Did I offend you callin it a comic…cause I hear all your people call it literature
lol. decent personal. you could have reworded it to make it better, for example:
"Webb you must be a geek having a comic, ive slain foes
& your comic attempts dont even rhyme - so they turned to plain prose"

That sigs huge im tryna type and it’s a total disruption
I told spidey from your sig that you would beat me and all he said was “that’s a flawed assumption”
corny. spiderman can't talk. Also, try to make sure your lines aren't so stretched out - try to keep them about 19 syllables at the most, 15 syllables should be your goal though. Its more interesting to read when its shorter. Also, remember to focus on HARD DISSES towards your opponent- you want to hurt his feelings - not including having spiderman talking to you.

You get dissed on the net but you a nerd so you ever get outta the house to get dissed?
Don’t think you have cause the minute you went outside you were shocked when you heard spider man diddnt exist
=another corny diss. of course he knows spiderman doesnt exist. try not to make up personals .. keep them real.. they can sometimes be stretched a little bit for effect but your personal was stretched way too far.

The rest is history don’t wanna know what you did once you saw a girl
Did you even make it that far…or did you faint the minute you saw the outside world

Lol, alright. but u gotta think - have other people used this before? of course they have. think of a wittier way to diss him for being on the computer all the time.

Man this dudes dumb spideys not real so remake a new name and move your record back to zero
Cause you thought usin the word “web” in your title would get you one step closer to your hero

you've focused on the spiderman thing wayyy to long... meaning that by this time everyones uninterested about the spiderman issue.

Here's some Words Of Wisdom before you try to diss me
Don't make deathwishes until you've reached Sweet 16
meh. blatantly stated, doesnt really diss him - if it does then how does it? it really doesnt touch on anything that disses him except his age... and age disses arent very effective.

But then again I guess you wanna lose now. So why what?
Throw ya off a building if you think that you a Flyweight
good, creative line..

While I give food for thought, you choke on the consumption
Thinkin that you gonna win? Now THAT'S a "Flawed Assumption"!
Nah. you fed off his verse for one, for two this was filler - make sure you include a punchline, some kind of comparison or creative line like ur flyweight one...

Yo weak ass flow can't float on top of the surface
Before you try to ride on me, Bitch, go get a permit!
this had a punchline but it didnt really diss him... you had the creativity but not the hard hitting diss you should've. all you said was that he shouldnt diss you without authorization basically.. not really dissing him. . just telling him not to diss you.

It seems to me that you obsessed wit callin people nerds
Seein how you used up all yo vocab into one verse.
alright. this couldve been done much better, not worded so badly...focus on your wording in order to make your disses hit harder. example of what u couldve done:

this hoe's sad, he's fucking repetitive and he flows bad
how can you rhyme when nerd is your entire vocab?


vote - E.L. webb for the flyweight line, and keeping his lines shorter, and a little more interesting. Anomaly you couldve won this in a few combined ways.. by shortening your lines length in order to make it more interesting... by being a bit more creative, or by dissing other things instead of spending so many lines on spiderman disses.

[E.L. Webb]

E. L webb don't take things so to heart people are only tryin to help u elevate and to do that you gotta take constructive critisism you seem to get better as you progress through your verse so why not try swappin things round before you submit it make sure it's everything you want it to be

When was I doin that?:

[jizza]

I think anomoly took this. His verse had harder punches and less typo's. Plus all his shit rhymed at least. Webb's verse wasn't bad, he just kind of bit if you see what I mean. It was just one line though so no dq. Anyway, I've seen better verses from anomoly, but he didn't have to come as hard on this one. Godd luck to both,

vote-anomoly