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December 16th, 2004, 10:30 PM
#1
PeanutButterKid
this mutha fucka....
PBKs got issues
He's going bald with chin pubes
He probably jacks off to 'Chewy' into a peice a tissue- paper
BK just may be a date raper
Somebody save her from this forum
Before I make it dangerous
His brain, it just, doesnt seem to say as much
His hanes are crusting from fucking ugly dames, he's a
fuckin gay paradist, he likes to take it in his anus
Like a stain, his spray is heinous
In a way he loves to hate this
You'll never play out, be famous one day or be the greatest
Cuz everybody'll point and say, "Hey, look! It's David Smith"
Bitch
Now who's the baddest?
Im slim, just not the Mathers
Your wack, your girls been havin attractions to other matters at hand
Cuz youre inadequate
Snort ten grams, an addict fix
Poor bitch mans been abstinent
From packin crack, fag accident
ooooooh, now thats a fashioned spit
Hocker back, slipped past my lip
You better grab an aspirin, quick
Cuz Davids back, he's ass kickin this Kid
;-) Bitch
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December 16th, 2004, 10:43 PM
#2
Newbie
yo i liked these bars you really picked it up towarrds the end... waitin fo pbk's response, and in the mean time leave me some feedback on my peice "thy eye"
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...40#post1910040
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December 17th, 2004, 02:17 AM
#3
You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.
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December 17th, 2004, 12:38 PM
#4
this post was ok, nothing special a couple of good punches and that was it, ya flow is average, just keep writing and you'll improve, peace.
reply 2 my new post
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=160700
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December 20th, 2004, 05:39 AM
#5
uh this piece was ok. it had some good punches i guess. aight structure. just elevate with your rhyming...peace
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December 20th, 2004, 10:39 AM
#6
Newbie
yeah end was good, some of the stuff rapped about was ummm i ono, but overall ya skills is developing nicely...
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December 20th, 2004, 10:46 AM
#7
this was nicely done......a lil work is needed but overall it was good.....and i liked how it picked up at the end....good effect i find...good job
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December 20th, 2004, 11:26 AM
#8
good end... but yeah, it was pretty cool... I dig it all.... Peace out, keep elavatin
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