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Thread: The Many Faces Of My Soul

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    The Many Faces Of My Soul

    The Many Faces Of My Soul

    The Face of Sin... The Deamon

    The side of foreboding evil... a feverish madness that drives within my soul
    the part with no control, makes me an unbeleiver, goes against my wish and goal
    i dont understand these thoughs, i see scissors and imagine driving them deep
    so they seep into flesh cutting ripping away the layers of pain that creep
    usualy triggerd by rage the build up of anger within that fules the thoughts of sin
    overwrought pain, the yelling and screaming of my household gets in my skin
    why are my parents always fighting... and then lash out at me, i dont understand
    they command me... i wanna bash free of this prison so there will be no demand
    my parents, i know thats the source of it all... or is it? thats what im always telling myself
    for now there is too much force, so i'll hide in my headphones let the world unfold iteself
    and put my thoughts on a shelf

    Many Faces one soul

    The Face of Freedom... The Wings

    i want to stand alone without fearing for others, the damage caused is to much
    every person i touch is looking for some advantage, it hurts too much to clutch
    so im letting go of all the devotion taking my life in a new direction of less emotion
    i'll grow wings and fly free without strings i could soar high, above the commotion

    Many faces one soul

    The Face of Joy... The jester

    My Shadow is not the only one that walks beside me, perfect balance, i feel at home
    a time when i did advance in a frantic dance of romance and joy, which came undone
    ruined my fun, the sun was blanketed by my own stupidity, although i remeber the joy
    that i destyoed, it was so pure, free of humility, but now i think was it all just a decoy?

    Many faces one soul

    The Facless Face... The Calm, Eye of the Storm

    The void in between the design of the soul, free of emotion, feels nothing gives nothing
    no sting of pain yet no feelings of joy... a socluded area yet no real purpose it brings
    a place where the wind dosent sing, the hatred does not brun with an open fire
    not a single thing transpires, just the void of gray, withing there is no desire

    Many faces one soul

    The Face of Loneliness... The Drifter

    I pushed myself from everyone that cared about me, now i sit all alone wondering
    what have i done... plundering all i had become, transforming into this helpless thing
    so i will sit in this room with its gray walls and listen to the silence of space
    lost without a trace, unable to replace the one thing i want my soul face

    Many Faces one Soul

    The combined Face... The Core Everything and Nothing

    my shadow is the only thing that guides me,
    it pulls me out of the emotion, yet not free
    dangerousely close to my ember begins to combust
    as it burns the heat of rage, love, envy and lust
    burns away... the crust of inocent trust
    rises in a smoky haze, as it dissipates to complete Helplessness,
    a transformation of the soul, into something new. as it tansgresses
    physically and emotionally... glowing yet with and earie shimmering
    the eye of the infant glimmering, replaced with the eye of the tiger,
    moving for vengeace and gain, forgot where we where
    forgeting morals, to bubble to the top using wits
    forfeiting the needs of others for his's own Benefits
    as he gwrows the transformation becomes amamant, he feeds
    solidifying its bases, confusing more and at accelerated speeds
    like a jungle that infests all soil, it grows. its roots diggin deep
    till it itself is infested with its own poison that begins to seep
    then withers and dies, realizing its own dilema, he changes views
    seeing through the eyes of the victims, sees the evil of the abuse
    feels bad for the ruse he commited, now he knows what he has done
    what has begun, reachs for the restrained, arms that he once pushed away
    now misses there worthy touch, wishes he could go back, and stay
    he ran so far into the abyss missing his loved ones kiss, gone witout bliss
    into nothingness... into the gray... leaving behind the glory's
    now he sits faceless sorting through past memories...

    Many faces one soul the very fire of the soul smothers the once burning ember that fuled it


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    if you have the patience to read this... i luh you...

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    twixn i honestly was expecting better. this was good but not great or good enough for a hall of fame nod. you are elevating quite quickly. i didn't care for the structure. some lines were extremly streched. overall the vocab and story were cool i liked how you separated everything. that was a big plus. in your rhyming it seemed like you tried for too many multi's which i thought hurt the piece. you used the same adgetive back to back in lines sometimes and that was a turn off. anyways pretty dope overall there were a lot more good things then bad things, i just choose to critique the bad stuff. i guess im in a bad mood sorry. stay up and keep elevating.

    please return the favor... i need feed from someone who knows what they are talking about.
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    thanks for the feed, man. took a look at yours not bad .

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    upinzi!

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    twixn i thought this piece was pretty good... it had good vocab and the emtion was great... the structure was bad... it flowed well and read well... i really felt the emotion. keep reppin boy...
    PEACE

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    thanks for the FEEDizlle

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    UpinZI.

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    Hey Twixn - I already repped this in SS, gave you some pretty positive feedback...

    The down side of the peice is the structure, but this is minor and can be elimated in your next drop quite easily if you put your mind to it...

    Nice drop, not Legendary, not HoF, but an above average peice...

    Mucho Props...

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    Yo dawg ... that was tight shit ... you would be my fucking role model if you would just work on that structure of yours man ... stay up ... your shits tight ... peace.
    My rhymes have been writtin, then spittin, and and their invinsible to/
    I aint quitin , they aint been bitten, theyll leave u wit a continual flu/
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    Man, this was a really good piece right here. Well worth the wait of reading it. IDK why there are so many lazy people out there who have not read this yet but god damn, it's good. Each character you played out in it's own way and u mastered the role. Good job in everything man. uppin this.

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    thanks.... i think im gunna edit the structure down... ill post a new one of the same later... peace.. tanks for the feed.

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    UppinZI... couple more times...

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    meh...

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