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    Formula - Live Life

    I live everyday like it's my last
    n' Pray the past will pass so I can live,
    I've tried to give, my soul to this
    But my mind drifts sometimes
    Can't focus it,
    Frozen, barely open, emotionless
    Catchin' flack for lack of desire..
    .. Don't you know who wrote you this ?
    I'm broken, it's
    Hard to piece together this puzzle
    When people who said they love you
    Just mumble n' cause nothin' but trouble,
    Why should I struggle to write ?
    I lay w/ the pen tight n' pad close
    Coupled up @ night,
    See - everybody wants a million dollar contract
    But once you sell yourself
    You gone want your heart back,
    Vision's unclear, blurred w/ contacts
    Made the decision to lie
    When they preferred you hon-est,
    Unless - you change n' rearrange
    Your reasons for wantin'
    To be in the game,
    Tell all my fans the same,
    Just keep lovin' me
    The way I love you lovin' me,
    N' we can exchange love for free, see
    It's a fine line you ride
    W/ things on both sides
    You gotta finally decide
    Whether to ride or die,
    Hide n' cry - tears
    Reminiscent of your early years,
    Dukes said you was out of it
    To you, they was unworldly peers,
    So every drop of water you shed
    Mirrors when you bled,
    N' w/ that said,
    People see your face now,
    Give respect to that head,
    You started out young n' dumb,
    Certain type of camoflauge
    Dressed up all you want but
    Couldn't hide the cameras scar,
    After all,
    You weren't the prototype,
    n' yeah they were jealous
    Shows solo some nights,
    Cuz they hate to share the spotlight
    'Cause when the spot's rocked right
    N' it won't them who done it
    They'll say you blockin' in the cock fight,
    Just keep pushin'
    Respect, Paid in Full,
    From your predecessors
    They'll aid your pull,
    Don't fade to fool,
    Stay a soldier
    March n' grow older
    Though the dark may roll closer,
    You can't fold, n' post up
    Expectin' a hand out,
    'Cause that's not what
    Bein' a man's about,
    No one has they hands out,
    Stand proud, don't back down
    Don't crack now,
    Cuz i've seen you in the act, wild
    Too crazy w/ your lines
    Paintin' pictures verbally,
    Writtens refering to pleas
    They not hurtin'you B,
    'Cause you bein' bad's the hyperbole,
    You've said "Music means the world to me,"
    You got a girl, I see
    So now you provide for a family,
    From now to when death's over horizons
    You can keep strivin'
    They'll admire it,
    Trust - they'll hear you
    After retirement,
    Solitary confinement,
    You can be stuck inside it
    But the sound waves can pound graves
    N' ground slaves for nights if..
    .. They feel the passion,
    Christs actually packed in
    Your actions n' motions of attackin'
    Oceans only half bent,
    Parted seas, pardon me
    Pardon you,
    You saved yourself from hardened blues,
    Growing up you hardly knew,
    What road that was laid before you,
    Nobody can ignore you, deplore you
    Or even whore you,
    They're on your time,
    That's right, live life,
    They watched you grow up,
    Now it's time to show up n'show um,
    That you can move
    Even w/ the world's weight on ya shoulders,
    So beautiful,
    Experience new things
    Max out life to the fullest
    N' realize what YOU bring..

    [Chorus X's 2 - First 5 Lines Sung]
    These are the days of our lives,
    You only got one to live
    So live it right,
    This is the time, this was a rhyme
    To open eyes..
    It's All On You..



    yeahh, first 5 lines sung by one of my girlies.. it'll be a nice audio, so cheah.

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    jnice length short bar though direct emmotional all in all ill
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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    Real, i'm feelin it. i like how long it was.(j/k) it was straight, thats bout all i can say.

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    Real, i'm feelin it. the first post was a joke, i like ya style, hit me up sometime if you would want to do sumthin crazy. Put the real feelin in it.

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    yeah.. uhmm anyway.. leave links.. up.

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    riight - i've replied to some pieces.. let's see favors returned eh?

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    formula, seems like this flowed pretty good if you was spitting it, the short bars are fuck all if you get it done right, i couldnt see any flaws in the flow or the way it would be recorded for audio, ive got a mate who writes similar with short bars and his works pretty much the same, get the audio done and get at me with a link, ive got some audios done you could chck, looking good mate, keep going and be intouch, oh didnt really mention much about the actual content, well, it was pretty standard writing, in the snese of life stuff, but done nicely, pz bruv
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    the first fifteen lines or so pulled me into it - liked this - it stuck out:

    I've tried to give, my soul to this
    But my mind drifts sometimes
    Can't focus it,

    your prescence came through nicely - felt very natural - teaching peeps - flow's on point - after that beginning section it didn't feel quite as strong - but it was still coo - pretty nice stuff - liked the smoothness - keep at it bro - peace

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    clean,, feelin it, and the message involved of stayin true to yourself. i liked the short bars leadin into the questions i.e Why should I struggle to write ?
    I lay w/ the pen tight n' pad close
    Coupled up @ night.

    respect.
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    this was good Formula, altho its a bit harder to tell if things written for audios will flow well, this rolled off my tongue nicely and smoothly cept for like 2 parts...but you wrote so I'm sure you can spit it....Good msg...sort of a motivational song...internals were nice as was the emotion...keep at it
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