JAbs vs Chewbakka

[Assazin]

Originally posted by:Chewbakka
I press tab thru ur assumptions, cause ur still jus a rook
How u ‘jab wit no punches?’ U could get sonned by a ‘hook’
AIGHT OPENER
Peeps shook to battle me, I make call outs n no one will say shit
They want me to ‘hit the road’, so ill throw ‘jabs on the pavement’
GOOD PERSONAL
Writers block for u is hereditary that’s y ya raps is fake
Wackness is jus in ur ‘jeans’,so my ‘lines’ will make u ‘levi-tate’
I LIKED THIS BUT YA FIRST TWO BARS ARE THE BEST
Everything u spit is weak, Id win even if I no-show fo this
Dog, ull never spit on ‘tracks’, unless labels have ‘loco-motives’
ANOTHER GOOD LINE YO ASS JUST DON'T RUN OUTTA LINES DO YOU
Heres the facts, the bars I bring, well easily top this cat
So I’ll throw Jabs around ‘The Ring’ like it’s a boxing match
GOOD ENDING BUT NO FATALITY PLUS ON TOP OF THAT GOOD PERSONAL

keep it up I already know about you it's self explanatory and shit.peace

Originally posted by:Jabs
Reputations, I stripped-so-many-fully... sick and sent-to-the-clinic-cruely
You good... but don't let ya 'ego' push you like a 'schitzophrenic bully'
MEH OPENER JUST FOR THE SIMPLE FACT THAT CRUELY AND BULLY DON'T RHYME.GOOD SHIT THOUGH
And when its done... when you see me in a forum you'll be scared and faceless
And told me to match with him... to be compared to greatness
YA 1ST LINE WAS STRETCHED TO MUCH AND I THAT FACELESS LINE PLAYED
In the rare cases... he's an addition to the bodies that I store for lunches
And ya 'arms' is 'weak'... you need 'splints' to 'support' ya 'punches'
PROBLY ONE OF YA BEST BARS
Just in case you want 'beef'... you can 'engulf' these bars whore
I'm destined to be 'FAMOUS'... even 'Chewbakka' couldn't put up a "STAR War"
MAYBE OR MAYBE IS IT ANOTHER PLAYED STAR WAR'S JOKE JUST LIKE STEVE-O SAID YOU GOTTA LEARN THE HARD WAY. ONLY SAY STAR WAR'S JOKES IF THEY ARE SMASHING
Just got scarred more... an became shooken-like-the-most
And thanks for the ass in ya avy... something worth looking-at-when-you-post
CLOSER WAS STRETCHED JUST LIKE ONE OF THE OTHER BARS IN YA SPIT
BUT DON'T GET IT TWISTED YA SHIT IS HOT BUT YOU GOT TO WORK ON THE STRETCHED SHIT AND STRUCTURE...THAT'S PROBLY ABOUT IT.

V/Chewy
for overall stronger punches and cleaner wordplay along wit more decent personals' good shit both of you though.

favor already returned by one kat peace.

[Scipio]

Not bad, Chewy did better though.

Funnier, better punches and all that.

JAbs, I've seen worse out of Frontr Lines., but you need work on perosnals mostly.

[Scipio]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=159707

[Problem-Atic]

aight..good battle....they really some decent talent on here....both came with good punches..

chewbakka....nice verse...kept the punches comin constently...some good wordplay in there..some ok multies....u came damn hard with the personals ..overall u had a nice drop..enjoyed readin it..some funny lines....

jabs...another good verse..kept comin with the punches.....once again nice muties..wordplay and personals....but i just dont think u came as hard.....for me its just all bout the punches and personals....and chewbakka came hard with both so im gonna have to say he edged it cos they just hit harder...no hate...pz

my vote=chewbakka

[Problem-Atic]

shit ma bad....i cnt vote..i aint got 100 posts...sorry bout tht guys..anyway..ive gave u feedback and upped this for ya....pz

[Cels]

well Chew, you could be an ok battler, but you need to learn whats played and not played.. most of your verse has already been done a countless amount of times, but non the less.. you still won.. Jabs, dont come so stretched, shorten your lines, and drop all those multis, there not needed.. also drop the ---- shit connecting them.. and chew, drop the '...' stuff around ya wordplay, we can see it

now

Heres the facts, the bars I bring, well easily top this cat
So I’ll throw Jabs around ‘The Ring’ like it’s a boxing match

that won the battle, seeing as it was the only ok punch in this

so V. Chew

[Mr. Key]

Thanks for the constructive criticism *trys harder* uppin #3

[Record]

nice battle.. i liked both verses,, really had a nice structure to read n shit.. punches were produced by both at a same level,,
chews boxing line was nice
jabs close was real nice also
wordplay was chews obviously
metas were jabs
personals were chews and bit of jab
chew got this cause he threw a shade harda punches in this.. i liked both verses but yeh u got this 1.. nice battle and g/l to both.. peace
in return vote here.. please honestly
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=158938

[Greens.]

v/ chewbakka, nice battle over all but i liked chewbakkas better because of his word play

[Mr. Key]

Damnt, thanks noobies for the feedback, but please lets get some peeps in here to vote that can poll vote please

[JAbs]

Yeah man you got me, lets me know that I need some workin' to do

One

[steveontrial]

chews bars were much more solid as far as line for line goes. jab just used fillers for each first line.

chews flow was ok, but jabs was just bad. work on making the lines sound good as far as structure goes.

finally, chews lines were more creative in general, such as bar 2. jabs were somewhat iffy.

for the reasons above...

v/chew