WarHawk

[Saiyan]

i'm a warhawk and i'm in the middle of a warzone
jumping over body's and falling ova rotten bones
ducking some bullets and ppl running 2 there home
i'm hit by some chrome, a medic is on his way
this could be the end of the day en ma mothafucking life
last night with ma wife, we making some love
last time with her so i'm praying 2 above
put on ma clothes and put on ma war glove
running on the field looking for some victims for the start
blood spoiling on the sand when i hit him in the heart
thru the smoke i hear ppl screaming for some aid
his soul taken away and that is the price he paid
walking with backup and see body's thorn on the field
it doens't matter if u walk up with a shield,
u still gonna be dropped dead, reload the gun and pump the lead
thru u, ova the battlezone is thick black smoke and it will happen
that there gonna be many people get choked by chemical weapons//


This Is A Pieace Of Ma Whole Text....

[Saiyan]

Mm...FeedBack? Someone?

[The Root]

this was a good story..rhyme scheme was mad simple..but at least you had one..try throwin some multis in there..and try to get off the whole, blood, guts, shoot em up , im the shit type stuff..its played, come original with some creative thought provoking material and you could be coo..got some story tellin skills..put em to good use man...

[Saiyan]

Aight Man...It Was A Kind Of KeyStyle...But In Battles I'm Much Better...Wanna Battle Then Root ?

-1-

[The Root]

what the hell why not...only if you peep my post an reply though..

[Saiyan]

Aight...Where Is That Post Standing? Give Me The Link...

[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

[Saiyan]

http://www.rapbattlehttp://www.rapba...d.php?t=159634