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    life is just a dream

    what does life mean,it all seems like a dream,
    dont front,you know,what the fuck i mean,
    cuz lately,im startin to feel like god fuckin hates me,
    ever since i was a baby,i felt like he fuckin played me,
    maybe if i knew,what the fuck im here for,
    id be a better person and,not so rotten to the core,
    im poor, so i gotta,steal to get cash,
    late at night with my mask,and my gun ready to blast,
    it all goes by so fast,today feels like last week,
    if you dont like me,kiss my ass cheek.
    im comin in this game,cuz i got somethin to say,
    and the word is,get the fuck out my way,
    so hey,i gotta,story to tell,so you might as well,
    sit back and spark an L,cuz it might take a while
    for me to tell it,damn that weeds so good,
    i can almost smell it,from inside this speaker,
    and motherfuck eminem,cuz nobodys weaker,
    ill stomp him in the face,with shit on my sneaker,
    cuz his last cd,aint worth the shit on my shoe,
    so have a nice day,and motherfuck you,
    bitch,


    verse 2

    this whole scene seems unreal,come on you know how i feel.
    i aint up in a studio,im at home for real and
    its all so surreal as the world
    keeps turnin,the weed i keep burnin,
    the money im earning,and everyday im learnin
    new fuckin shit,i just never use it,
    and one day im gonna lose it,i know people'll say
    whos this comin, up-on the mike,
    but when i start rhymin,its just like,
    this one night,i was walkin down the street,
    goin to get,somethin to eat,and i heard my cell ring,
    but i dont pick up,cuz its probably some,
    some fuckin slut,
    the next thing i know,
    willy robbed the store,silly of me to think,
    it was some whore,
    blowin up my phone,
    like they always do,
    yo ill will,this ones to you,

    verse 3

    where did we come from?
    where will we go?
    the anwser?dont nobody fuckin know
    it blows my mind,i just dont understand?
    whats the point,to bein a hu-man?
    but i just try to chill,relax and take a pill,
    but still,
    i dont know,
    which one to take,i dont want to,
    make this mistake,
    red or blue,its up to you.
    cuz life is but a dream.
    and you know thats tru


    p.s- rapped semi slow to a slow beat. verse 3 is more of a ending then a verse

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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=1884942
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=1884952

    ps- willy is my best friend who robbed the krausers in our town and got 10 years. he was 17 when he did it. he called my cell right b4 he did it and my stupid ass didnt pick up so maybe i could have talked him out of it cuz he was drunk as hell when he did it.

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    well this was better than tha "who shot ya" shit... but i still felt ya rhymes were a little on tha simple side 'n' in need of expansion... eminem's new cd might be wack as fuck but listen to his older rhymes... "imagine goin' from bein' a no one to seein' everything blow up 'n' all you did was just grow up emcee-ing"... notice how he rhymes there as opposed to "i'm comin' in tha game with sumthin' to say and tha word is get tha fuck out my way"... but ya verse wasn't necessarily bad... flow was smooth 'n' tha realism gave it that extra sumthin'... ya just need more complex rhyme schematics... keep elevatin'... peace...

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    yeah man i see exactly what your saying but the rhyme wasnt supposed to be complex and the simplicity of the rap goes with the beat i made for it plus i really wanted to get several points across without confusing people like some mcs do,you make a good point about eminem although the rap you pointed out was simple, he just ripped it there, i rip it to here is a line from something i havent finished yet

    even after my casket drop
    ill be a ghost with a gat ta pop
    how many rappers i haveta top
    to be the best after pac

    tell me that was simple

  5. #5
    uppin

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    It's Willie Baby Willy B's Avatar
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    Quote Originally Posted by the flamethrower
    even after my casket drop
    ill be a ghost with a gat ta pop
    how many rappers i haveta top
    to be the best after pac

    tell me that was simple
    that was slack jawed yokal simple

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    I'm Bakk!
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    This was iight....just a little to long......to much reading gets boring....so either shorten it up or spit some amazing shit...

    stay up

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