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Thread: winner

  1. #1
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    winner

    i 'member my street with potholes & ditches
    the memories sweet... cops cold & vicious,
    windows locked down, doors nailed, i hated it once
    it was the only jail i knew that the state didnt run
    i debated the fun, that we had graffiti'n walls
    murals of our own failures completed it all
    whatd lead to our fall? of a place so deteriorated
    clearly berated, fueled only by fury & hatred
    but on a particular date it... all came to an end
    i was the lottery winner, i used to say to my friends
    .
    .
    .

    after i hit the jackpot, i chuckled at scattered change
    it was the self-worth that made up my battered name
    cuz the riches came & i spend it wisely
    but money cant buy a true friend beside me
    just enemies who despise me, i demand em to stop it
    i feel like im always slappin away a hand in my pocket
    cant deal with the stress & the lies, expressing demise
    i feel so guilty for not feeling successful inside
    theyre pressing a guy, i dont know whats spellin abuse
    half of the time i cant even tell if im used
    i swelter & muse, no time to feel cruddy at all
    when people i used to know suddenly call
    theyre just mud on the walls, that seem to be back
    but i moved out of that house & cleaned up my act
    time to move on.. but its funny to dance on
    money has made me the only one in a mansion.

  2. #2
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    Pretty good...

    Unique rhyme content here...normally money brings the bitches and hos...
    Gangsta lifestyle bullshit that no one on here lives but like to pretend they know about.

    This was more realistic, though, I felt it leaned towards whining.
    Just leaned, not crossed completely over.

    The flow chopped maybe once towards the bottom, other than that it was very smooth to me. Normal, everyday vocab...

    Overall, real nice, decent story and good emotion shown.
    This isn't a "greatest hits" from Feebs...

    But it's worth the read...

    Pay back the feedback, will ya?

    Buried alive with the one you love...

    Peace

  3. #3
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    lol @ greatest hits.


    yeah thanks for replying. i'll hit that up right after i figure out why the fuck my xbox live doesnt work. isnt that a bitch ? i want to kill someone right now. theres no logical reason my fucking xbox wont connect to xbox live but it just wont.

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    uh i thought this was alright, it had some alright flow and structure, just seemed a little fake to me. but you got some skills 7/10

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