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tweetburd
Def by mouf
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this mofo is a no show. What did he get scared or somethin?
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Fuck it i'll just post and get it over wit even if he don't show:
Ur a fuckin no-show, ready ta answer callouts in haste,
but u couldn't 'spit' to a 'beat' if someone 'nutted on ya face',
Ya rhymes are clutterd wit disgrace, they're less admirable than a cactus,
And Def got Suicidal tactics....so ill make U a kamikaze so I can get pracitce,
Ur noo good at this so why even try,
Isn't Tweety bird the one wit the head too big ta fly,
Wit the old Grandma always tendin to it's side,
She must be the one u fuckin, while sylvester hits u from behind,
Ur faker than a Looney Tune so can u tell me why,
Cartoon characters don't exist...why are u alive?
THis isn't the movie Space Jam, and i ain't Jordan,
And just like it's ratings now u ain't important,
I did some sortin and found out It wasn't a lie,
R. Kelly did make that song to encourage u ta fly,
And tweet u ain't a real burd man who u think u kiddin,
The closest u got ta one was when u was chokin ya chicken......
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i'm not a no show for no reason/
i had to go and check my baby boy was still breathin/
so now i'm here though it may be a little out of season/
i'll try and come up with lines that'll leave out reelin/
lying flat out on your back starin at the ceilin/
cos i can attack like a gak/
with a rat a tat tat/
just as you're wallkin away leavin holes in your back/
but as you stumble on your face/
i ain't glad that i entered this race/
so full of hastle/
but it's me the one ends up flat on my face/
Def by Mouf definatly one that, no question.
Its an unofficial vote because i dont have enough posts to vote.
v/def by mouf
aight, now that he dropped............uppin #1 for votes.
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uppin #2 fa votes, c'mon peeps, i'll return favas.
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Ur a fuckin no-show, ready ta answer callouts in haste,
but u couldn't 'spit' to a 'beat' if someone 'nutted on ya face',
(i personaly thought that line was tight good opener)
Ya rhymes are clutterd wit disgrace, they're less admirable than a cactus,
And Def got Suicidal tactics....so ill make U a kamikaze so I can get pracitce,
(weak line dissapointing follow up)
Ur noo good at this so why even try,
Isn't Tweety bird the one wit the head too big ta fly,
(great punch at his signature)
Wit the old Grandma always tendin to it's side,
She must be the one u fuckin, while sylvester hits u from behind,
(another good line keeping it personal good shit)
Ur faker than a Looney Tune so can u tell me why,
Cartoon characters don't exist...why are u alive?
(good personal line again)
THis isn't the movie Space Jam, and i ain't Jordan,
And just like it's ratings now u ain't important,
(nice not as tight as the last two though)
I did some sortin and found out It wasn't a lie,
R. Kelly did make that song to encourage u ta fly,
(not bad ryhmed)
And tweet u ain't a real burd man who u think u kiddin,
The closest u got ta one was when u was chokin ya chicken
good ending started and ended good two very good spit allround)
i'm not a no show for no reason/
i had to go and check my baby boy was still breathin/
(not bad)(not really at punch at mouf)
so now i'm here though it may be a little out of season/
i'll try and come up with lines that'll leave out reelin/
(personally didnt like)
lying flat out on your back starin at the ceilin/
cos i can attack like a gak/
with a rat a tat tat/
just as you're wallkin away leavin holes in your back/
(weak,i used the rat a tat line yesterday and no1 liked they were right its old and whats a gak)
but as you stumble on your face/
i ain't glad that i entered this race/
(i thought he was already on his back need some consistency with what your saying)9
so full of hastle/
but it's me the one ends up flat on my face/
(didnt get that at all very poor)
v/def by mouf
not even close def took this easy liked the way it was keeped personal with good punches
tweetbird u didnt hav any real punches u didnt hit hard at all, seemed like u was tryna tell a story to make ur self luk good where as def by mouf had good structure was far more creative n had more wordplay n easily took this battle without a doubt.
i cant post a vote but if ur like me u'll value opinions so if u aint gon post a vote on my shyt post a opinion....
It AiNt Da SiZe Of DaWg In A FiGhT, ItS Da SiZe Of FiGhT In A DaWg
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tweet done meet his DEF lol i crack my self up hommie need to step up his game if he wanna battle
he anit even have ne puchlines what type of battle rhyme was that?????
POVERTY BITCHES
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I don't have enough posts to vote "officially", but Def by mouf clearly won this battle. His verse was well thought out and structured, while tweetburd's was sloppy and unfocused. I don't know what you were thinking with your closing line: "but it's me the one who ends up flat on my face". That makes no sense and seemed to diss yourself. Sorry I can't vote yet, but if I could, Def by mouf took it. Maybe you can return the effort and hit up this: http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=157253
no offense and thanks for the feedback but............newbs votes aren't gonna get me a win. I need all u people wit 100+ posts to vote on this battle. Please don't sleep on this......favas will be returne they alwayz are.
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Originally posted byBM
Ur a fuckin no-show, ready ta answer callouts in haste,
but u couldn't 'spit' to a 'beat' if someone 'nutted on ya face',
WEAK OPENER
Ya rhymes are clutterd wit disgrace, they're less admirable than a cactus,
And Def got Suicidal tactics....so ill make U a kamikaze so I can get pracitce,
WHO ADMIRES A CACTUS WEAK PUNCH
Ur noo good at this so why even try,
Isn't Tweety bird the one wit the head too big ta fly,
GOOD PERSONAL WIT PUNCH CONNECTED
Wit the old Grandma always tendin to it's side,
She must be the one u fuckin, while sylvester hits u from behind,
DAMN THAT'S SAD STICKIN WIT THE LOONEY TUNE SUBJECT COOL
Ur faker than a Looney Tune so can u tell me why,
Cartoon characters don't exist...why are u alive?
OK
THis isn't the movie Space Jam, and i ain't Jordan,
And just like it's ratings now u ain't important,
OK.....
I did some sortin and found out It wasn't a lie,
R. Kelly did make that song to encourage u ta fly,
PLAYED
And tweet u ain't a real burd man who u think u kiddin,
The closest u got ta one was when u was chokin ya chicken.....
OK ENDING BUT NO FATALITY
ok flow I see you stuck wit the looney toons subject that was more then likely ok because there's a lot of shit to use on that. Then it looks like you ran out of concepts to talk about work on it a lil bit but hey dawg overall good flow I liked it keep it up...
Originally posted by:Tweety
i'm not a no show for no reason/
i had to go and check my baby boy was still breathin/
THIS IS A BATTLE NOT PERSONAL LIFE
so now i'm here though it may be a little out of season/
i'll try and come up with lines that'll leave out reelin/
lying flat out on your back starin at the ceilin/
YOU MISSED 1 LINE TO FINISH YOUR THIRD BAR
cos i can attack like a gak/
with a rat a tat tat/
just as you're wallkin away leavin holes in your back/
SAME HERE BUT ALSO NO REAL PUNCHES
but as you stumble on your face/
i ain't glad that i entered this race/
WEAK IS FUCK
so full of hastle/
but it's me the one ends up flat on my face/
NO FINISHER
hey dawg you need to think about battles and rhymes and shit before you do anything aight then....just a helpful hint
V/DBM
for overall better punches and overall better verse.
hit the link back one love.
Def
Ur a fuckin no-show, ready ta answer callouts in haste,
but u couldn't 'spit' to a 'beat' if someone 'nutted on ya face',
(I like the opener, that second line was good)
Ya rhymes are clutterd wit disgrace, they're less admirable than a cactus,
And Def got Suicidal tactics....so ill make U a kamikaze so I can get pracitce,
(That second bar was wayyy forced and stretched it fell short)
Ur noo good at this so why even try,
Isn't Tweety bird the one wit the head too big ta fly,
(Kinda lame but...ok)
Wit the old Grandma always tendin to it's side,
She must be the one u fuckin, while sylvester hits u from behind,
(Ahh a little beastiality...Its ok as a personal)
Ur faker than a Looney Tune so can u tell me why,
Cartoon characters don't exist...why are u alive?
(Nice compared to the other lines so far)
THis isn't the movie Space Jam, and i ain't Jordan,
And just like it's ratings now u ain't important,
(Pretty decent punch but nothing devastating)
I did some sortin and found out It wasn't a lie,
R. Kelly did make that song to encourage u ta fly,
(LoL you are sticking with personals throughout this whole match.. its ok)
And tweet u ain't a real burd man who u think u kiddin,
The closest u got ta one was when u was chokin ya chicken
(Meh?? Not feeling this as a closer upper but its not that bad)
Tweetburd
i'm not a no show for no reason/
i had to go and check my baby boy was still breathin/
(Uhh, its an opener but not really good for battle useage)
so now i'm here though it may be a little out of season/
i'll try and come up with lines that'll leave out reelin/
lying flat out on your back starin at the ceilin/
(Nothing complex no punch or metaphors or wordplay...it ryhmes)
cos i can attack like a gak/
with a rat a tat tat/
just as you're wallkin away leavin holes in your back/
(No ...not feelin the gat talk in a text verse, theres not even anything witty or creative about it)
but as you stumble on your face/
i ain't glad that i entered this race/
so full of hastle/
but it's me the one ends up flat on my face/
(Serious elevation needed here. Bad closer)
Def by mouth got this battle hands down. I mean his verse was iight but at least had some ok punches and dissed his opponent personally througout the whole battle. Tweet burds whole verse was very simplistic and didn't have anything special about it...very basic vocab, need more practice I suppose
V/Def
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def-ok flow, ok structure, sum aight punches
tweet-ok flow, ok structure, weak disses. work on the punches i think ya got caught off gurd here cuz that verse looked like it was dun quik.
overall def had better flow and stronger punches.
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