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I hit up the one in Poetic Scriptures.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...97#post1785197
I hit up the one in Poetic Scriptures.
can I kick it?
uppin
good work here - a bit sappy for me but good work - Mesmerize's flow was good - nice use of internals and multi's - very minor word choice issues - but the vast majority of it I had no beef with - Lyric - the emotional content in yours was great - you described that feeling of loving attachment almost perfectly - nice thought progression - rhyme complexity could be improved but otherwise no real issues - once again a nice read and a top ten piece for sure - keep at it - peace
hit me and Nique's "In the Twilight Zone" please
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Hence Forward
Wow...
Just now reading this piece and I must say...
Nicely done....
Mez you opened your piece up with such a re-freshing
flow scheme. Nice vocabulary great vocab....
wow can't wait for me and you to do our collab
should be great after seeing you do a piece like
this....
Lyric...
Outstanding like always....
nice imagery...vocab...flow...
structure everything...
Mez:
"A blanket of ecstasy encases me as your arms embrace my waist
Erased reality into a divine dream of loves enchanted place"
Love that line...
Lyric:
"Comforting arms surround like seas, providing a deep dense of security
Holding you near to me, is better than anything I could ever imagine"
Skills true skills...
definitely top 10...
well done you guys make me proude...*cries*
lol...thanks bio
it was chill i lil deep for me but you droped it like it was hot hit me up on my OM
Yo i think it's phat man really deep in to detail yo i like it!
^ I wish I could understand Nova's reply.. :/
Great piece guy/gal.. borderline excellent.. the flow was flawless on both parts.. Mes, the way you worded your verse was incredible.. everything, every word.. was meant for that verse.. nothing was out of place.. it was truely the defintion of the 'perfect verse'.. emotion, imagery.. it was ALL there.. the vocab you used, no word was out of place.. each word fit perfectly n' helped the image you were trying to get across just jump out @ me.. you kept me enthralled the entire time.. Lyric, same for you pal.. just a truely great verse.. flow was perfect.. the details were great.. everything I said for Mes can be said for you.. 'cept i'm lazy n' don't want to re-type it.. haha..
Awesome work.. this is how shit should be done around here.. everyone - take heed to this piece, n' model your shit after it.. I applaud you two.
thanks for the feed guys...uppin
2 MUCH 4 WORDS I REALLY ENJOYED THIS PIECE, AND I HOPE TO SEE MORE, KEEP, KEEPING ME IN 'AWE'.........IT WAS GREAT, THE WHOLE THOUGHT THAT WAS PUT INTO THE TOPIC, THE EMOTIONAL JIST OF IT........UPP'N....
KALIKOZE911...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=154025
WoW........This piece was Lyriclly Mesmerize'n lol. Naw but nice work guyz this was hot......
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