in my life

[TinkR]

Tears,tears so many tears
crying ,shouting,my weakness appears
have no strenth to lift myself
thought i had you,but now your someone else
can't go home can't stay with you
i'm so upset,what should i do?stupid for asking,why did i ask you?
family desposes me,now you have too
stop explaining,theres really no use
i know how you feel,stop trying to explain
your happy with you now till it turns on you and you feel my pain
i know you have,but you don't now
i have forever,and will forever not just now
so stop acting hard ,and look in my eyes
maybe i fight sometimes,but i'm probably the best you'll find
maybe youll get better,better than me
but remember how much i loved you,just remember me

[Vikkie™]

i like it nice emotion made sense

[Foreshadow]

Nice job Tink. You did a very nice job with the emotion on this and it basically was the whole poem. The transition was very nice. What I think would make this more appealing is if you changed the font to arial or trebuchet ms to make the structure look better, nice job..

[mindone]

I thought it was very emotional, portrayed perfect, and i also think you should keep it up cause you got a lot of talent.
By the way i love you.
Infinity!

[TinkR]

I thought it was very emotional, portrayed perfect, and i also think you should keep it up cause you got a lot of talent.
By the way i love you.
Infinity!

Thnx B i love you too

[yellowledbetter]

deep;thoughtful;interesting

3 things about "in my life"

[Daddyz$Angel]

I liked this a lot. Lotta emotion involved. Came from ur heart.

I can definitely relate except in the opposite way. Same sorta shit goin on with me. Good job. Keep it up.

I look forward to readin more of ur stuff.

Stay up.