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    Urban Faces.

    Urban Faces.

    Visited London in the week and wrote
    this whilst i was there..think deeper.


    As a journey begins, within an urban creation
    each break in the clouds..
    ..envisions a plain stealing a hole generation
    a place where patience is un heard of, and space not an option
    where peace and quite, is replaced by the opposite adoption
    where movement flows constant, no hesitating to think
    resulting in lives being changed, within a reaction to blink
    everything linked, conscience of surroundings..awaiting the enemy's
    each corner more twisting, fulfilled with more and more memory's
    no chemistry, by day the city's shining, blinding with potential
    but as the shadows creep upon us, it seems negative is essential
    lives aren't confidential, more lies than truth's are spread
    there’s no surprise cause word of mouth's heard before it’s said
    It’s easy to be lead home to a place where most trends start
    but easy to find your trend finished, if you’re not taking part
    If you haven’t a heart, then you’re likely to fit rite in
    rubbish is never recycled as the city has sold the bin
    I’m looking deeper within, now feeling sick with stress
    kid’s playgrounds are confined, to combine with homeless
    a fucking mess, on the outside we seem satisfied of these places
    but realizations a bitch, when we look within the cities faces.

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    rite lets go..................

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    well i thought you captured the fast moving life pretty well there, some interesting lines in there.... the flow was also pretty smooth and good transitions, a well written verse here... i liked it...

    where movement flows constant, no hesitating to think
    resulting in lives being changed, within a reaction to blink

    ^^favourite bar... nice man... keep up the good work
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    thanks man.

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    bounce.

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    w00t.

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    This was cool shit. It flowed seel. The concept wasn't mindblowing but it was cool. This was a pretty decent drop. Keeo doin' you, homie.
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    thank you my man.

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    "It flowed seel"
    -I don't even remember what I wanted to say there.

    "Keeo"
    -Should have been 'Keep'.

    I always fuck up typing. My bad.

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    ^^^^lol.....but aye effect, I totally enjoyed that shyt right there, smooth like butter, nice conceptz ta make ya brain work a bit....definitely note worthy 4 sure.....peace!!

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    nice topic, decent multiples, little work on flow but who doesnt,
    thankz for an intelligent piece

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    word......good replies...thanks alot....

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    pretty deep man....
    you grasped the concept well

    didnt know if u were gonna pull it off....but u wrote it well...

    gd flow...story tellin was on point

    in all...a good drop...keep writin'

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    thanks man......

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    pretty nice piece here man...rhyming was done well as well as the emotion..imagry could be worked on...but overall a good drop Effect
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