never dropped 1 herre b4,but chcek it out...

[Mis-Is]

check it..

Your stressing me is of no fucking use
trynna game me?...bitch u so fucking loose
this anger developes in my own silence
dont make me own ya,cos den it gon be violence
i got alot of memories on how u made me cry
but i'ma make 'em old stories...xcept u wanna die
how dare you ask a whole me for a lil respect
when u know i'ld say FUCK U without ant regrets?
expect "the heavens" call....till u pay u fucking debth!
n i wanna give u a taste of my pinky glock
then tell me how it feels to c ur blood pop
cos therre aint NO PEACE till i pull a fucking shot

if you looking for a dick to ryde....herre..catch d fucking mic
thought i cant spit tight,but u wish u were my type
i keep flowing as fast like a ride,its iight u take a flight
cos i'ma make u know this aint a dyke & i eat w/e's ripe
for 6 years you werent present in my life
and now u want me to love ya..u know shit aint right
you'ld never reach my height cos u a bitch that cant even bite
if you wanna spet tight,grab a pen and start to write
im like a fire and on me u just a cube of ice
i'll grind u into pieces...like tiny grains of rice
cos im black and i can fight,and u wack cos u white...thats right

RIDE = WHIP.....a whip....a car (for who dosent know)

BITCH = THE FEMALE DOG....not bitch as we all always intendNote : i came up with this verse listening to "act a fool" of master p...i tryed rapping it to that beat and i swear it comes out tight...but anyhow...y'all tell me what ya fink...

the last 2 lines about the black and white werent to all whites....it was to the person i was spiting at...so dont think im trynna be a racist cos i aint

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=147731

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=147732

[Mis-Is]

uppin

[~IlL PrOpHeT~]

Your stressing me is of no fucking use
trynna game me?...bitch u so fucking loose
this anger developes in my own silence
dont make me own ya,cos den it gon be violence
^^^^^^^^^^ YO NICE GOOD FLOW


i got alot of memories on how u made me cry
but i'ma make 'em old stories...xcept u wanna die
how dare you ask a whole me for a lil respect
when u know i'ld say FUCK U without ant regrets?
expect "the heavens" call....till u pay u fucking debth!
n i wanna give u a taste of my pinky glock
then tell me how it feels to c ur blood pop
cos therre aint NO PEACE till i pull a fucking shot
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ AIGHT DATS GOOD U HAD FLOW (MURDER SCRIPT)


if you looking for a dick to ryde....herre..catch d fucking mic
thought i cant spit tight,but u wish u were my type
i keep flowing as fast like a ride,its iight u take a flight
cos i'ma make u know this aint a dyke & i eat w/e's ripe
for 6 years you werent present in my life
and now u want me to love ya..u know shit aint right
you'ld never reach my height cos u a bitch that cant even bite
if you wanna spet tight,grab a pen and start to write
^^^^^^^^^^^ AIGHT GOOD UR GETTIN PERSONAL (WARNING)

im like a fire and on me u just a cube of ice
i'll grind u into pieces...like tiny grains of rice
cos im black and i can fight,and u wack cos u white...thats right
^^^^^^^^^^^^^ AIGHT NICE CLOSA GOOD PIECE HERE


YO NICE VERSE IT WAS KINDA LIKE AN DISS BUT IT WAS COOL U HAD FLOW AND MULTI'Z

U WERE GETTIN PERSONAL

GOOD PIECE

I GIVE IT AN 7/10

KEEP IT UP

CHECK OUT MY OPEN MIC

~THE PERFECT WORLD~

[J Spark]

A yo, man i thought that open mic was on fire u ripped it nice. I liked it cuz it was origional.

MAN ANYBODY GO CHECK OUT MY OPEN MIC, IT'S CALLED "THIS COMES EASY"!

[BeRLin`S BesT]

pretty aight though i felt it were kinda simple rhymes here n there...the flow was there throughout the whole piece n u had some slight highlights....keep droppin mc...pz

[Mimesis.]

This shit is wack..

good structure.. alright flow..
wack punchlines..
wack topic.. dont talk about glocks and shit..
thats just annoying.. and wack..

I guess keep workin on it, but u got a long way to go..

[Stlshowmegurl]

You feel how you feel and at times gotta get it out up in your flows. Telling the truth makes a good thread even if you talking about glocks(lol) U do U I'm digging it

[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

[lyricalgenius]

yea, I wasnt really feeling this piece, I dont know what them first few guys were talkign about, the rhymes were simple, and the flow was off, I can't find anything good to say about this piece, but hey ur a newb, so keep wrking at it and you'll get better

[Mis-Is]

This shit is wack..

good structure.. alright flow..
wack punchlines..
wack topic.. dont talk about glocks and shit..
thats just annoying.. and wack..

I guess keep workin on it, but u got a long way to go..

^^errbody got a long way to go...(1)

as for the topic..well,i had hate in my heart and i felt like saying what i thought and felt..nah mean?..so glocks came to my head and i put it down...

anyways thanx for the feedback...


uppin

[GaMeSTa]

I thought it was pretty good, better then the average one I see (But then again I don't read that many Open Mic's.. but I will when I start posting mine)

Also, I think you can talk about whatever you want, don't listen to what others say about it

[~{ExClusive}~]

needs work lol seen her before see needs hard work lol it was wakc no ahte but wack

[Mis-Is]

lol exclusive.........iight



uppin