Inject.

[Sir Skiddz SoPhrenic]

A storm rages on the outside, the calm from within
A storm rages through her outside, calm within her skin
Simple enough to get an understanding of her pain
Complex to try to relieve the addiction of pain in her brain
She tries to leave this lifestyle, but it ends up coming back
And she can't react, caught frozen, red handed in the act
Of what she relies so much on, spirited Monica,shes so gone
Never had any talent but decided she'd sing her swan Song
but without the grace of a person, lived their life and ready to die
She was leaving as a person living life gettin ready to die.
Its like she signed her last will and testament, at the window ledge
She lost her grip on life, and slipped through the windows edge
but it "it" that spoiled her ever so needed need of life escape
Some say she was lucky, but luck went against her...
...she landed on the firescape...
brought back in, never a loner, but hated the company of people
Knowing that they always want to judge, what they never see through
Causing the pain which ran as deep as injected by the heroin Needle.

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[Bloom.Quist]

Interesting read. I liked the wording you chose to express the emotion. Very in depth in a sense. This poem was exceptionally hard for me to understand, which was challenging, but i actually enjoyed it that way. I dont know maybe its just hard for me to connect with. Anyway it was still a great piece. Well done fam

[Tim]

good work liking the emotion you showed in this piece i loved reading it i agreed with what bllom said a bit challenging but great at the sametime

Its like she signed her last will and testament, at the window ledge
She lost her grip on life, and slipped through the windows edge


nice piece keep spittin

[DEF M.E.T.H.O.D.]

very interestin shit, liked the words u choose, and the flow was aight, wut i liked bout it is its cmplication, it was tight and it wus good to read.

[Sir Skiddz SoPhrenic]

Lol...complication...and the original title I had in mind was "Simple." lol

[Sir Skiddz SoPhrenic]

up.

[Sir Skiddz SoPhrenic]

<---Sleeper victim.

[{UneeK}]

Very interesting read. The wording was interesting, and the various personifcation/metas was very well placed. I love the way that at times you repeat the same words but the text portrays a completly differant litature of context. Very nice!!!

Opening kept me reading this...

A storm rages on the outside, the calm from within
A storm rages through her outside, calm within her skin