im sitting here saying fuck you

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written by dest august 7 2004..........
( oh yeah dest aint my real name..its my alias..
i wouldnt use my name on internet battles..
real name for real life ...feel me?)
im a make this audio asap .
so yeah listen up 4 it ..it will explain the flow....




wisdom is needed and greed is feeded to change your view....
dont want a get deranged do you ..the strange view you ...
as the ones with issues to quick to diss you ........
wise words dam i miss you but i wish you were still here ..
but i gotta let go and see through these 22 tears ........
for years i never bowed down to my pears just tryna earn respect ............
but u forget not to let close ones take a bet ...........
on certain things ...you interested see what lifting the curtain brings ........
the hurting sings songs of sorrow and borrow a shoulder to cry on ..........
i never seen the reason to rely on jesus to return .......
no longer wants to please us let us burn in the hell we invented ......
leaders unaware they could of prevented these by seeing crimes ...........
they just focus on the tru human beings rhymes ..............
im seeing blind been led astray like your not looking or seeing a way ............
hollywoods all E'ing today thats why they so delusional.......
im using all my lyrical skill and not thinking a myrical will just suddenly appear ...
im not a dog i dont attack from the rear i go head on .....
but the elete wont let on to what they really up 2 .....
so im sitting here saying fuk you ....................

[-uski-]

you need to leave 2 links of Feedback u have left on other ppl OM or this will be closed by a MOD...thank you

Any way this was a alrite piece needs work on ya structure...which i think threw of ya flow...u forced the imagery i feel which stop the feeling hitting me...i think ya rhyme scheme is pretty good...all and all keep em droping....

pZ

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=146632

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=140571

[Talksick]

Ok, a simple drop..

It rhymed and had topic.. It needs work on multies, structure, flow, and imagery.. Mostly structure dawg.. This was decent though..

6/10

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upping for feed .......... oh yeah and the flow side a things...
thats the reason i wanna go audio with this track. ause i think the way i type my shit out i dont no how to write it and structure it and those sorta things... thats not what makes you a good mc.
actually spitting it out does... im not gonna make it in the game if i no how to write my shit out.. i write it but when spitting it i jut no were to break keeping spitting.. spead it up switch the styles were needed... my text cant show you that... so im going audio asap.. need the funds so im working on it. but liten up for it if you have ever doubted my flow.... im not sure how to "flow "while writng it.. i only no how to flow while spitting it...

so watch for it


yeah any more feed.........

i felt my rhymes were of better tech than a few of rb ...might go check what your got on offer talksick......

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