checkin in.....
checkin in.....
check
Behind a ‘pseudonym’ all ya battles are in vain & rhymes way too tame,
Like cassius clay ya changed ya name & still took a beating again.
Like a hooker on her 1st night you new to the game & are gonna get fucked,
Think you might win? Na you like a cat on it’s tenth life man – you outta luck.
You challenging me is like doing a bungee jump with no elastic,
& use that same line again as a metaphor for you elevation wackness.
‘7’th line now how about a few deadly sins ‘envy’ cos you jealous of my wins,
& ‘sloth’ this took no effort what so ever, & ‘gluttony’ can you see my fat grin?
I respect you for trying though, no on second thoughts you’re a fuckin moron,
You couldn’t beat me with a baseball bat strapped on to a sawn-off shotgun.
I wasted that on you. OK peeps get voting…..
that's almost 30 mins.....
don't no show on me.....
Your profile’s empty… but there’s plenty to write
I checked your past battles… not a personal in sight
So tonight why not try and use one… ill use your avy’s face
Micheal caine played carter… you only play the disgrace
How that for a taste… now stand and prove your space
I may be a noob… but at least I know my home place
damn, you sig your wins… that’s 5 with 1 defeat
last time I saw a record like that… he tried to be discrete
dom-N8 take a seat… and ill close this with a suggestion
change your name to its opposite to give the right impression
people get the fucking personals, or dont vote...
uppin for votes............................................. .................................................. .
uppin 1
yppin 2
...c'mon lets get some votes going over here
dom-N8 your structure was Gone to hell! I didn't see any punches that are worth mentioning, so that is something you really could work with. You had maybe 1 or 2 personals throughout your whole verse, but none of which were impressive. Your opener was wack, and your flow was a little to basic. You had 0 vocab, and you could use some wordplay. Overall, elevate.
pseudonym your structure was ALOT better than dom-N8's. Your punches were decent, some of which hit pretty hard. But only a few of them did. Your flow was pretty solid. Vocab was weak which you could use. You had some personals, which helped you out in this battle. Overall, you need to elevate but you got this in my eyes.
V/pseudonym
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uppin 3
uppin 4
i know this aint too good of battle, but c.mon surely you can spare the time to vote.... final upp
that was tight dom
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OK peeps tell it like it is................................................ ..................
Uppin............................................. .............................................
dom-n8
Behind a ‘pseudonym’ all ya battles are in vain & rhymes way too tame,
Like cassius clay ya changed ya name & still took a beating again.
5/10...um..this would be decent, but he never changed his name
Like a hooker on her 1st night you new to the game & are gonna get fucked,
Think you might win? Na you like a cat on it’s tenth life man – you outta luck.
7/10...alright
You challenging me is like doing a bungee jump with no elastic,
& use that same line again as a metaphor for you elevation wackness.
6/10...ehh
‘7’th line now how about a few deadly sins ‘envy’ cos you jealous of my wins,
& ‘sloth’ this took no effort what so ever, & ‘gluttony’ can you see my fat grin?
8/10...nice wordplay
I respect you for trying though, no on second thoughts you’re a fuckin moron,
You couldn’t beat me with a baseball bat strapped on to a sawn-off shotgun.
3/10...wack and doesnt rhyme
overall - 6...some alright lines in this one,
Pseudonym
Your profile’s empty… but there’s plenty to write
I checked your past battles… not a personal in sight
5/10...not hard,,
So tonight why not try and use one… ill use your avy’s face
Micheal caine played carter… you only play the disgrace
6/10...solid
How that for a taste… now stand and prove your space
I may be a noob… but at least I know my home place
7/10...good
damn, you sig your wins… that’s 5 with 1 defeat
last time I saw a record like that… he tried to be discrete
4/10...wack
dom-N8 take a seat… and ill close this with a suggestion
change your name to its opposite to give the right impression
7/10...good line
overall - 5.8...this was kind of weak, most of the personals didnt hit hard, vocab could be better too...
v/dom-n8
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If you Die with the devils first kiss.then Look to the sky and Say This:
I live High in the essence of unbleviable Gods Hands
I love like roses and sink threw fingers just Like Sand
From Bein Satans Angel..To Hating The actional Clan
Tryin to Be heartless.........But thats not Being A Man
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