my best open mic i think

[MC_Merc]

i was born in a womb that wanted for me to become
an educated man, cuz its rare where i come from
but to my eyes, i realized that that i could not achieve this
because in my life, i am deprived, so i'm a misfit
i was raised and razed cause of my ethnics and color
my papa was a childish fool, couldn't get any dumber
for me to summarize i was raised like garbage
here presently, i dont give a fuck what the law is
i realize that the worlds ignorance will destroy me
i'm a hustler, so they label me evil and deploy me
2 the pen, the devils den, now i'll neva hustle again
i lie to myself, cuz weed is my one and only true friend
no one will understand i'm the only brown tiger
in a pack of siberians, i'm the only fighter
i struggle cause i cant live life this way, so i die,hey
it aint that bad cuz they din't listen to what i said

[~Whitebread~]

Amazing! Really really good shit man. Awesome flow, great rhymes! Nothen I can really say besides that was BOMB!

[K cypha]

i thought it was a decent drop... good flow/ structure; rhyme sceme was a little basic, tho; and try to up the anti on the vocab, too... u could do better. but i liked how it made complete sense, and that's what made it a good read. good job, man , keep up the good work.

[Bigg E Z]

..'Tis not bad for a new guy

I can tell youv been writtin for some time, But i can tell that you have allot of room for improvement..

Upp your vocab a little, Read the dictionary..

Your flow was decent, Needs improving, But it was easy to follow & good, Considering.. =)


The topic was ver emotional.. But you need to relise that you cant rush things..

" Once uppon a time, There was a king, He got Married to a princess, They lived happily ever after, The end" - For example..lol

Your emotion in this was strong, A clear sign that u can become a nice topical head..

Good piece..

[TheWonnishEye]

yeh decent shit ma..nice structure..maybe u should ge tit a little more complex, mulits werent that good buh i think that the concept was pretty coool..keep this shit up, u got some skills