Allevyate vs. Octamous Rhyme

[OCTAMOUS RHYME]

Hit Me Back

[Allevyate]

yo what the hell i didnt agree to this....whatever ill do it who spits first and when is it due

[OCTAMOUS RHYME]

My fault, I had 2 start it up somehow

10 bars (20 lines)

Due by the tonight

I go 1st

Sound good????

[Allevyate]

ok fine ill spit by tonight ill do it later..............................

[OCTAMOUS RHYME]

My Falt, Neva Saw The Bitch Slapped Thread

Anyways..........


-Why do I gotta battle this fake, named Al-lev-yate
-Dismantle & Rape this faggot theres no challenge 2 great
-You can not imitate a batt-le-r you'll hit the gravel 1st
-Slicing w/ percision leavin ya adams apple to burst

-Give you a crash course i'll fast forward ya rhymes
-Your styles ancient like dinosaurs this aint the Land Before Time
-I'll camcord ya demise & send it to Banned From TV
-Take it to your academy spit like I was packing the heat

-..........................The chrome will hit leaving you blown to bits
-Kill all of my oponents put one in ya scotom bitch
-Leave you swolen from hits dog, you dont want it w/ me
-Honestly i'm a leaving you shaking like Mohammed Ali

-You just a wa-na-bee rappa so get down on ya knees
-& bow to the king! Stay fronting & get thrown out of the ring
-You about to get beat! Maintain to rain on parades
-Fuck da mascarade i'm a eat ev-ry-thing on ya plate

-I'll take you down, Face it clown I'm comin sprayin a round
-Lift you off of ya feet & toss 3 at you on da way down
-& then i'm takin the crown, i'm des-tined to de-fend
-Leave you carried out of a church by ya six best-friends

What!!!!!!!!!

[Allevyate]

ok check here it is

Calls him self octamus rhymes, makes up proposterous shit in his lines
Doesnt know when to stop and I’ve been showin him the red signs,
Likes to separate his words we can call him Mr. Hyphenation
Makes up obscure references and always fails to explain em
Octamus Rhymes we can call him OR for short
For Obscure Rapper like he really is in this sport
Or Over Rated because he consistently is comin up short
Dumb Cat thinks he omni-present, that he can live in NYC and Boston
Oh I’m sorry about my vocab, OR, I can feel your mental exhaustion
I just don’t wanna b generic like you, “bustin caps in asses”
Your most brilliant moments equal my mental lapses
I never asked for this battle and he didnt either
He just set it up and tells me to be there
I mean who the fuck does that, go to bitch slapped, at least call me out
I mean just click on your mouse, ur lazy as high school dropout
Please forgive me man I went under ur predetermined limit
My lines run mental circles around u, ur only option is forfeit
I got some advice, just elevate some more, no more played lines like “You Whore”
Cause I swear your lyrics are like an overfucked bitch, cant even fake it no more

[3-6Neilson]

i cant vote, not enough posts, im not going to go into detail because i cant vote yet, but ill drop my basic opinion
Octamous:
Your only personal was your first two lines, and even that you said "Why do i have to battle this fake, named allevyate", number one your the one that challenged him. Number two it seemed other than maybe your first four lines, the rest didnt have any personals and seemed prewritten. You have potential just go after who your battling by with more personals. You also kinda dug yourself a ditch making a newb mistake just posting a battle and not calling him out at bitch slapped.

Allevyate:
You were alot more personal in your lyrics which made yours the clear winner in this battle.
I think your first line would of sounded better if you took out the "shit in his" an wrote
Calls him self octamus rhymes, makes up proposterous lines, just my opinion though. Like i said im not goin to go into detail but you had a alot better vocab then he did. Your punches were alright, not the best, but looked like they were really good compared to octamous's lyrics. There wasnt nothing that i particulary liked but i did like the comment about him being lazy as a highschool dropout for him not callin me out

My vote would be for Allevyate for more personals, better punches and vocab, i thought he was overall better

anyway check out my battles

[Allevyate]

Feedback appreciated 3-6 Neilson, im gunna get to ur battles soon, if not today tommorow thanks

Uppin for some more votes

[Allevyate]

uppin 2........................vote and I will vote on yours

[Allevyate]

uppin 3.................leave a link and i will return the favor

[Morbid Manner]

octamus had alright structure and flow but appart from that none of his verse was good
his punches were very basic and none hit hard and they wernt disses they were more like threats, which is wack when it comes to text battling
his opener and closer wernt good and neither was his vocab

alleviate had a standard flow
his vocab was good and he used lots of personals
his punches hit fairly hard and were consistant throughout
his verse was more complex and he was actually gunning the other bre rather than saying stuff like im going to kill u
vote alleviate

honest votes needed link in sig

[Allevyate]

thanks for the feedback, but why didnt you poll? i will hit up yours now

[Endeva.]

octamous, i didnt really see any real punches, you need to work on connecting and directing what your saying directly at your opponent... i didnt see any personals either which is an essential part of battling.. you need to work on it....
...Allev'... you came quite a bit better... some decent punches directed to him specifically, so nice personals.. not the best but alot better than your opponent... you set them up better also... and it seemed a smoother verse.... thought your closer was a bit weak, but in general a more consistant verse... so you get my vote.... v/Allev

could you both throw an honest vote down on one of these battles, all are mad slept on.... thnx

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=133452
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=133301
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=129176

[Neruda II]

Octamus-your structure was good, all the bars were even. A little bit abstract but at least your bars didn't run on forever. You're punchlines were a bit played but they were brought to a higher level with the multies. I think the multies showed a bit more safisticated. I felt that your punches were very used and recycled, but overall they were alright. Vocabulary was definetely normal nothing too special. overall, I'd give your verse a 7/10

alley-you had really bad structure, your bars ran off, sometimes even going for two lines. It was very annoying. The flow was disrupted by the on going lines which was also irritating. The thing that was good about your verse however was that your punches weren't played. They were new and better than some of OR, but to say the truth they were pretty damn weak. Your vocab was better so you get some points for that. overall, you had long lines, bad flow, good vocab, horrible yet original punches, so I gotta give you a 5/10

Vote-octamus

[Essen]

Octa- it's actually funny cause your setups were very good, but almost every single punch fell off in the end. For example, in your opener, set-up was good, you mentioned his name with hyphens, so i was expecting a personal, but then fell off in the end saying something pretty general. You had some cocky approach, but not enough. Work on increasing the metas, similies, multis and wordplay in your verse. Also, try to be more direct with your punches.

Allevyate- I liked your cocky approach in this battle. Also liked your opener, it was pretty funny and humor most of the time leads to a good punch. Also liked the "OR for short" line, nice personal. Although you did feed, you included many personals and much humor in your verse. Try to incorporate more multis and metas and similes along with the humor in your verses for the future.


Good battle guys, but my vote goes to Allevyate for more consistent, hard-hitting punches. Keep elevating, peace.