Lifetime of Poetry

[Kre-z]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=133431
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=132993&page=2

LIFETIME OF POETRY

Tappin the paper then my brain turns blank
Hearin taunts and haunts from brothers wit the same rank
I peep the poetry, floetry that’s a part of me
My mind brings surgery like a physical lobotomy
A rose grew from concrete, but I ain’t full grown
And so I don’t stand tall people decide to throw stones
SO many times I heard the police on the phone
Now they know my name, my family, and my home

So many times I spit reduce enemies to particles
My lyrical skill reaching international articles
My homies dead, insane or confused
Moved from they family, they win, and still they lose
Fake lovers, pretending to watch the people
They should watch out cuase love backwards is evol (Evil)

Hear the demons, block em out wit my mind
Soul tryin to live, but still I die
And when I was born I was born wit three sevens
Stay good until night, then I’ll be back wit my brethren
Exercising the flo in me, grown like older ‘G’s
Cause I be A prophet wit a lifetime of poetry
Hope, The illusion of humanity
Choice, ‘Cause of evil and insanity
Love, never do cause it turns to hate
Honour, stupid and overrated
Patience, straight only for the wise
‘Cause every virtue is backed by lies

[Kre-z]

Yo uppin for feedback

[Chris Black]

This was cool. The flow was aight. Rhyme scheme was better in some parts than others. The topic wasnt very concrete. When that happens, most of the time I loose focus while reading. I didn't on this one though. It was aight. Keep doin' you.

My Open Mic:http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=133021

-W1

[Kre-z]

Uppin for feedback

[Knightmare]

This was a good topic for a spit. Nice imagery u used through the whole thing but I thought the flow was slightly below average. Use of vocab was good along with the points you made. The closure was good, the last few lines built up to prove your point in the last line.

Good work

[Kre-z]

Yeah my flow was off, I could tell, but I'm a newb, I'll get better. Anyway, uppin for feedback.