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Thread: Soft focus: randomly better than you [w/content,fah Q, rule]

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    Soft focus: randomly better than you [w/content,fah Q, rule]

    deacon

    With no help from these mail order brides
    frail disorder won't bail on our unfortunate lives,
    couldnt coordinate arts passion and our jobs
    just another cartrige inserted into corporate slots,


    Manikins lie restless, cressoned with to do lists
    As I lie blessed and bruised with truth and real limbs
    Interpreting their surfaces with worthless use of two fists
    I smother wisdom with hard thoughts and get rewarded
    back with food stamps

    FaH Q

    A mind game interferes it's cause while leading to effects
    Peers stumble, Won't scrap the sheet metal in this wreck
    I'm outspoken provoking this rage while opposing the press
    Urging for breath to grasp the opportunity that's left...


    Content

    I feel like a drug dealer with
    all these fifty fifty cats trying
    to see where my heads really at,

    And being boys again now is so far
    from possible when I got fifteen
    narcaleptic friends that wanna
    double their roster too,

    But tables turn when my futures
    compared to you in a hospital,
    Man you lost the truth and left me,
    Gods left me to let you breathe its true.

    Rule

    Rule Devoloped A Taste Of Forever,To Reword Phrases To Sound Clever
    No Matter How Stormy The Weather, I Wont Settle For Less Then Better

    -
    Chances Come & Then They're Gone, Becareful Don't Hold Wishes To Long
    You Can Slip & Drop What's In Your Palm, Don't Be Scared Or To Alarmed
    Reach Your Personal Best & Have Fun, Never Be Scared Of What You Become
    Never Reach For Less Then The Sun, Cause If You Reach For The Stars..
    ....Reach The Biggest One
    softfocus



    while you write to rapbattles I perform on stage

    How's it feel to lack in comparison?............

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    Deacon:::

    With no help from these mail order brides
    frail disorder won't bail on our unfortunate lives
    this was really your only quoteable i found your piece was nice but it was missing depth it only scratched the surface of ideas and didnt demonstrate them properly

    FaH Q

    A mind game interferes it's cause while leading to effects
    Peers stumble, Won't scrap the sheet metal in this wreck
    I'm outspoken provoking this rage while opposing the press
    Urging for breath to grasp the opportunity that's left...
    for what little piece you had it was nice well rounded i liked...

    Content

    And being boys again now is so far
    from possible when I got fifteen
    narcaleptic friends that wanna
    double their roster too,

    But tables turn when my futures
    compared to you in a hospital,
    Man you lost the truth and left me,
    Gods left me to let you breathe its true.
    this was nice i gotta say your style is original... like i said with the first guy it dosent seem like you fully expose the content you intend to convey but nevertheless this was nice...

    Rule

    Rule Devoloped A Taste Of Forever,To Reword Phrases To Sound Clever
    No Matter How Stormy The Weather, I Wont Settle For Less Then Better

    -
    Chances Come & Then They're Gone, Becareful Don't Hold Wishes To Long
    You Can Slip & Drop What's In Your Palm, Don't Be Scared Or To Alarmed
    Reach Your Personal Best & Have Fun, Never Be Scared Of What You Become
    Never Reach For Less Then The Sun, Cause If You Reach For The Stars..
    ....Reach The Biggest One
    i like your style i like how you set yourself up your flow was nice this was the best part of the whole piece....


    overall each emcee came with a different style and each are on different levels this was a pretty good read overall i liked.... hope you can return the fav.... big upps to all of you
    On Top.

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    yea, this shit was straight
    it was good for me to read
    poor rhyme scheme tho
    but, besides the rhyming
    everything else was good
    it should've been a lil onger
    from all of ya,
    overall, it was good
    nice mix of styles to make a good crew
    keep this shit up
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    it was supposed to be 4 lines from everybody lol...

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    Fah Q was the only one who followed the rules
    he gets straight A's and hes fuckin special

    and he still came just as nice
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    word this was a straight up cool collab...honestly i look past any critique anyone has to offer. Keep it........ This collab had it all nice job boys

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    while you write to rapbattles I perform on stage

    How's it feel to lack in comparison?............

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    Upping...

    We should get another crew collab together
    Soft Focus
    ..Returns..

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    word..with people following the rules lol
    thanks content, your sexy

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    Pretty nice shit. I liked the first stanza by deacon alot more than the second. Fah Q'a verse was nice. Con's shit just didn't catch with me though. It was the rhymesccheme. I couldn't get it. I fels Rule's verse the most. Overall this was a cool piece. Keep doin you fellas.

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    It's been said that the rhyme scheme was
    inconsistent, it should ahve been evenly
    panned out between the four of you.

    Deacon
    you had nice imagry and your flow was pretty
    good as always, preferred the first stanza th0.

    Fah Q
    nice flow, it had some nice fluency about it, and
    seemed to roll of my tounge, nice wordplay too,
    bit short but good th0. Godo luck in SS this wk!

    Content:
    wasn't feeling it too much, the style changed
    from Deacons and Fah's, maybe thats what
    put me off, but it was decent, more poetic
    th0 i felt, nice th0.

    Rule
    You had the best flow IMO, some dope
    added internals and it had a real sense
    of fluency about it, you came hard with
    nice imagry too...

    was a decent piece, nothing extrodinary..
    but nice..3/5...sorry about the short
    replies but it wasn't really that long...

    if you 4 got time..:
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...66#post1476166
    Open Mic's


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    ^^^^^just shut up will you seriously...... You couldnt even compare so why critique. Contents piece was grand but you just cant see it because your use to this cookie cutter bullshit kind of topical...move on sally
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    How's it feel to lack in comparison?............

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    ^see what happens when you critise ppl, how about you grow up and accept that not all ppl share your same views..seriosuly, i'm giving MY opinion, and why the fuck are you hating on me...i thought Wicked said about the same thing...so hop off your own dick...seriously, grow up.
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    ^^No
    softfocus



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