you know the rules... 12 lines, due 20 mins after check ins; no d/r votes; no b/s.
dreamer
Johnny C.
you know the rules... 12 lines, due 20 mins after check ins; no d/r votes; no b/s.
im checkin in lets go .........................................
im checkin in........................................
This emcee is a weak pretender, is rhymes are not valid
couldnt spit good shit, if he just finished tossing salad
im bout to lay him to rest, im bout to fix his pallet
even if florida votes count, cant BUSH me out the ballot
this battle is easily won, cause your not at all a good rival
couldnt have a good verse if you was writing from the bible
this dude probaly wears pink and purple, and pops his collar
the new emcee version of erkul, chiwawah pretending rottweiler
your not on my level, this cowards facing a fucking rebel,
couldnt spit hot shit if he just finishing kissing the devil
the rhymes this kid spits is prehistoric its past old
common dog i would expect better shit from an asshole!!!
im impatiently waiting on dudes reply, he came up with the twenty minute rule and now he's breaking it, i guess you need a few minutes i dont blame ya
i guess this dude threw in the towel its been over a hour and he still hasnt spit i think he needs a handicap or some maalox to spit some shit come on bro wheres ya verse i got shit to do cant be playing aroung with you all damn day
moderator this wise guy logged off please let justice be served i feel my time has been preciously wasted with this clown
I got fucking cut offline. sorry.
here i go.
This fool thinks he can beat me... or thus it seems...//
But Johnny'll "C" to it... to fucking crush his dreams.//
His lyrics are SHIT... at least the ones i've seen...//
...I wish I had a roll of Charmin to wipe them off my computer screen//
He thinks his raps are cool... but sumthin just ain't right...//
cuz this fool couldn't make them cool... if he packed them up in ice//
I've heard he'll bite verses... and take what he needs...//
so i'm a slip poison in my lyrics... to kill him when he feeds//
he thinks i won't kill him... tell him to quit the bitchin... please...//
he's gonna die... he'll try to get a blessin from a priest... but just get STDs//
dreamer, I've beaten you; you've "lost"... yer "in need of directions"...//
I just slaughtered ya worse than Lethal Injectionz!//*
*he's losin in a battle wit lethal injectionz right now.
dude, seriosly... i got cut off after it took me 20 to spit, an i had to re-do it. sorry. (up 1)
damn that was a nice verses
dream
open/close: they were both good decent hits
personals: you really didnt have any personals
punches: there were 3 other than open and close and they were ok
flow: ok
rhyme: basic
Johnny
open/close: they were both nice hard hits with personals in both
personals: the one in the open and close were nice
puches: whole verse was one big hard hitting punch
flow: good
rhyme: good nice to see something other that same old basic shit
vote Jonny
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=133321
could you both hit this up when he post
dreamer had a good structure and fairly goo flow
but he didnt use any personals and his punches were weak alot of his verse didnt make much sense and looked like u were only concentrating on geting the verse to ryme rather than concentrating on good punches
eg.
"This emcee is a weak pretender, is rhymes are not valid
couldnt spit good shit, if he just finished tossing salad"
johnny c had wack structure but his flow was alrite his punches were alot harder and he used some personals about his name even though they were weak its better than none atall and his opener and closer were better than dreamers
vote johnny c
drop an honest vote on the battle in my sig
One sided battle...
Dreamer
This emcee is a weak pretender, is rhymes are not valid
couldnt spit good shit, if he just finished tossing salad
Str8 opener, played shit like though
im bout to lay him to rest, im bout to fix his pallet
even if florida votes count, cant BUSH me out the ballot
Bush you?......Lol, yea.
this battle is easily won, cause your not at all a good rival
couldnt have a good verse if you was writing from the bible
Yet, another played line, sorry
this dude probaly wears pink and purple, and pops his collar
the new emcee version of erkul, chiwawah pretending rottweiler
Lol...creative, but blah
your not on my level, this cowards facing a fucking rebel,
couldnt spit hot shit if he just finishing kissing the devil
Played and a little forced
the rhymes this kid spits is prehistoric its past old
common dog i would expect better shit from an asshole!!!
Too many shit lines
Iight, you gotta work on ya stuff. You're lines have played concepts. Elevate and throw harder punches.
Johnny C
This fool thinks he can beat me... or thus it seems...//
But Johnny'll "C" to it... to fucking crush his dreams.//
Using your name nicely I see. Str8 Opener
His lyrics are SHIT... at least the ones i've seen...//
...I wish I had a roll of Charmin to wipe them off my computer screen//
LOL, nice.
He thinks his raps are cool... but sumthin just ain't right...//
cuz this fool couldn't make them cool... if he packed them up in ice//
Str8, needed better vocabulary though.
I've heard he'll bite verses... and take what he needs...//
so i'm a slip poison in my lyrics... to kill him when he feeds//
Haha, would have been a better line if you spit first, but good.
he thinks i won't kill him... tell him to quit the bitchin... please...//
he's gonna die... he'll try to get a blessin from a priest... but just get STDs//
Nice wordplay
dreamer, I've beaten you; you've "lost"... yer "in need of directions"...//
I just slaughtered ya worse than Lethal Injectionz!//*
Good Closer
Johnny C Killed this battle. You're good. Just don't do "//" at the end of your bars and don't put quotations. Come holla at my crew "The Faculty" You'll be in definately.
aight, i'm uppin for votes(2); come on, ppl... by the way, which one of these ^ peeps didn't poll thier vote?
by the way, dreamer: you're a dumbass. ya posted 3 times other than your check-in and verse, wasting 3 ups! (yea, i wasted one, but i didn't use to try to boost my morale)
Dreamer - Your structure was good because your lines were all fairly even. You flow was smooth from beginning to end. You had no personals which took away from your verse. Your punches were all played (verse/bible, hot shit/devil, shit/asshole), you lacked originality here. This was a below average verse from you.
Johnny C. - Your structure could use some work by evening out the lengths of your lines and getting rid of all the /'s. Your flow was okay but you lost it in a couple of bars. You had some nice personals that hit him very direct. Your punches were off and on, some were alright but others were played. This was an okay verse from you.
V/ Johnny C. for better personals, punches and originality.
Now both of you drop an honest vote here:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=132381
ok, uppin for votes!!!!! come on, people, this could thurn into my first 5-0 win.... just help me out and vote! i'll hit up whatever battle link ya put up at the end of your explaination... I just need people to vote!!!! (3)