A Life Lost..

[TruthZ]

Not even going to edit..thats how NEW this situation is
for someone i know..letting emotion out..Dedicated to
anyone who's ever lost a child, young or old..My heart
feels for you..


It's funny how, the weather always seems to match the relevance of emotion
THe loudest words you'd ever speek, would be the ones leff unspoken
What's deep inside, is a loss, a disconnection, a pain from the depths
Of my own torture, revealed thru the discontent of our emptiness
The things you'll never see, images never dreamed, and ideas left away
Our future was so colorful, so unforetold, only color my pallet now holds is gray
The eye's we'll never see, have gone far away, and I'll never see
Anything and Everything, that from above, our Lord intended for you to be
So now i'm left scrambling, hiding a peakness, my struggle, my weakness
Of tears with a heart of it's own, breaking as they fall, leaving a deepness
It's cliche, its typical, for us to want to be with you any how, any way
I'd give my life or two, for you to see this world, any time, any day
Any heartbeats, Any smile's, i'd give anything to walk upon your road
Help you growup, help you love-learn-and live, and call this place home
But now, instead of tucking you in at night, I'm left tucking away my tears
Tucking away the thought of teaching you things, taking you thru the years
But with all rain storms, whether long or short, soon comes the sun
Reminding all of the earth, reminding my heart, that you were my one
From above you were sent, and sent away again to a place from above
Leave's you knowing that everything you were, was created with love

[Emcee Universe]

....thanks bro.... beautiful work... ill remember this..

[Thrust]

if this was longer maybe i would have been brought to teers...

this is very emotional and very well said...religiously impacted which i love...and the dedication to emcee universe (which who i assume) was very well done...you brought through the meaning of losing a child and all that a child means to a father which i wouldn't know really but i'd seem to understand in some way..loved the piece...and congrats for doing this for someone...good heart

[TruthZ]

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[TruthZ]

Over 20 views and 2 replies..awesome

[Steven William]

this was very deep and emotional...
and yes good at heart to dedicate this to
Emcee Universe that's Ill I like the piece
imageyr was strong and it portrayed
the meaning of a child to a father or mother even
and how a child can be recieved and taken so swiftly...
nice work Truthz...
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(Whoa, KO!)

LoL I had to^
check out my piece

A New Father

[Emcee Universe]

Uppin.... thanks yall for replying.

[ILLunatic]

You need to post 2 links, or this will get closed.

[2hot2handle]

that was good and was good for the topic. your structure was a little off. your vocab was aight and your flow was a little choopy. The ending was great. you did well keep it up.

[Brandon Heat]

Hum... I kinda liked this... I don't know why honestly... I read it like 4 times... lines seem a lil to long... but that's just me...









Finally you're droppin good shit... One.

[Criminal Minded]

thats sum good shit keep it up

[TruthZ]

that was good and was good for the topic. your structure was a little off. your vocab was aight and your flow was a little choopy. The ending was great. you did well keep it up.

Poems have no set structure, flow, rhyme scheme or whatever..
Sorry..

Thanks for the feedback..keep it coming...links coming soon as well

[TruthZ]

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[TruthZ]

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[Stricknine]

Aw man nice, that was beautiful, a real work of aristry!Even thought i have never even lost a child somehow i felt like i did! it was that damn good! you captured the emotion of loosing a child or loved one perfectly it almost brought a fucking tear my my damn eyes