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    Denial

    Denial


    Tears bleed from innocent eyes, as I refuse to believe
    Pupils disperse flowing rivers as my emotions unweave
    Deep expressions arise, blind to the facts that are alive
    This lie is another piece of the puzzle in my endless demise
    The story of a man, who denies his talent in his lyrical drops
    Alters reality without believing others lies, fibs, or thoughts
    Truth is lost in shadows, caused from translucent thoughts that thrive
    It can’t be true, I won’t allow it, will my soul survive?
    Abstract thinking, I don’t trust your feelings or anything that you tell
    The days purpose forgot, my mind has been locked in a cell
    Raindrops of forgotten fear, that this lie may not be a fake
    Rewind times as corrupted minds begin to cripple and break
    Head throbbing, as tears are dropping from my blood stained face
    Racing confusion in this illusion of useless truth-less faith
    Craniums drop misplaced information as my relation is freed
    Eyes bleed as I watch myself grow up from an infant seed
    Greed overwhelming beings into fleeing from the unknown truth
    Don’t believe me? Look around you, everything you see is living proof
    Topical flows grow into finished woes as my lost emotions’ pile
    Story of fiends, forgetting dreams, as they believe their own denial
    Po'Ethics - Est. 2004




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    I tried to write something that would be good enough to get nominated into legends. Yet this forum is real inactive, so if i get replies i doubt someone will nominate this. Anyway for an explanation, its about denial. Which is basically trying to force ureself not to believe something because u dont want it to be true. Hope you enjoy the read. Give me some honest replies.
    Po'Ethics - Est. 2004




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    I am new to this sight and don't know a lot about poetry yet but I thought this peice was excellent. I thought the flow was very good, and your use of vocab was excellent too. I was able to imagine every detail. I wish I could give you better feedback, but like I said Im a newbie to this shit so I dont want to tell you something if I dont know what im talkin bout.

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    [url]/http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?p=1424447#post1424447/[url?]

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    Um, I dont think I know how to leave a link yet, can u please help me?

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    Leaving a link, go to the page that u want them to see. Copy the adress of it, then paste it in the other forum. Basic...

    Thanks for the reply Mesmerize, nice to see some new people in here...
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    Blah...everytime i try to write something good enough for legends. No one even bothers to read this...

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    I Liked The Whole Motha Fuckin Thing Styll!!!

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    Ok this here was a pretty catchy piece..the flow kept it easy to follow..you showed off some imagry here..the depth of this piece was good..pretty good read...1 of the better you've posted that i've hit up..you show you've got a good sence of talent..you were good at attacking this denial scenario

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    This was an excellent piece in almost all aspects. The message is great and the topic is original and creative. I feel that you did our crew proud by writing this piece.


    Rhyme scheme was good because of the multies. Flow was great, flawless. Almost everything in this poem was superb. Emotion out the ass, every line was instilled with perfect emotion describing exactly how the speaker felt. I really can't find anything wront with this poem. There is something missing, not sure what it is, but whatever it is, If you could add that lil something to it, then It would truly(and with all extent of the word) would be legendary. Great job man.
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