>>>2MORROW AINT PROMISED<<<<<<<<

[REALISTIK]

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enhancing a trance/ no need for a act tough stance//just like theres no need for a RnB dance//no need to get scared if a gangster glance at you// so why tha fuck you run and go get your crew// good times and bad is wat we all go through// but your final out come is up to you// look into the eyez of tha guys that despise then rise and see through there fake ass lies// cause in the end every one dies//but not every one flies up to heaven// so think twice before you rob that seven eleven or the corner store//cause you might end up wid a padlock on your door//i seen many brothas gone before//so wat im typing try not ignore//remember theres a diffrence between wat u said and saw//

HOOK: Tomorrow aint promised
its up to u to come upon this
cause do we really belong this way
even tho its hard to live an honest way

I want to bring a positive out look upon this day//
cause i learnt many lessons along this way//
i still got a lot to learn//
i no its hard to stop and turn-in a diffrent dirrection///
but if things are bad theres allways a positive reflection//
staring right bak at you//
you can bring it out with the right attitude//
you aint gonna win if you just run everytime some swing a bat at you//
if some one helps you out show a bit of gratitude//
so my life long itinerary//
is for people to not live in sin or fearing//
for every one to be caring//
living in unity//
cause this is nothing new to me//
it was taught by my family//
who brought out tha mutha fukin man in me//
taught to stand strong when others are daming me//
and police are banning me from certin places//
this is a str8 up form of a being a rasict//
so when it gets hard to face this world at times//
just remember these REALISTIK rhymes//
shit should be fine just stay sublime//
and look out for a sign cause sooner or later god will send one to you//
spiritually he will come to you//
never treat some one like they under you//
forgive for what people have done to you//
cause if i live with a bad memory//
things will come bak and be condeming me//
thats why im reading up in tha bible //
it guides me through this struggle for survival//
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just somethung i quickly wrote down.............................................. any feed baks good

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=130275

[Mistral]

its 2 links now man.

And I liked the title of this and the concept but probably could have went a little different with it maybe...but it was alright the way it is....change the structure in the first verse up so its not in paragraph form...and try keeping all your lines around the same length so it helps the flow out or try to count the syllabals in each line and should probably keep them around 13,14, or 15 syllabals...Vocab was alright in this i thought....just really fixed up the structure and flow a bit...and maybe make it a bit more complex like with multies and such...But keep at it man

[siCCz]

i liked it, it wuz alil simple... BUT, it wuz good, nice concept, and it's some true shit. but like he said, flow, structure, complexity.. those can all be worked on. you gut tha intelligence to write hott shit, jus get tha complexity in there, and ppl will be waiting to hear new shit from you.

overall - aside from all tha flaws, just for tha realness of tha piece... i give it a 7/10.

keep at it homie, elevate, and make us wait around like crack fiends for your shit! lol

pz

[REALISTIK]

yo thank for the feed bak........garenteed to b listen 2............................i gotta post some links cause i aint want this shit 2 be closed cuz i think its pretty nice.............................................. ............................................... http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=129707
... http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t130515