Invisible

[Miss Behaving]

Follow me
Respect and Dignity
Are a distant memory
And we’re all going invisible the same way

Our world spirals out of control
We lose ourselves into the whole
Self destruction our only goal
And we’re all going invisible the same way

Now there’s no individuality
Lack of conscience and morality
This is our reality
And we’re all going invisible the same way

Acid begins to rot your mind
While escape you try to find
Only death can break the bind
And we’ll all go invisible the same way


Feedback welcomed as always Thanks.

[aSap iLL]

hm............... it was okay....
nice sequence....
good delivery...
nice feeling ..
overall good job

[Miss Behaving]

anybody care to add anything?????

[shawty"B"]

i like it.....it flowed out nicely...not alotta emotion....and the imagery came in small bits and peices...but it was a enjoyable read

......fav part......

Now there’s no individuality
Lack of conscience and morality
This is our reality
And we’re all going invisible the same way

keep droppin
return tha favor

....bless

[Baron Mynd]

i liked the repetition of the last line, didnt really feel it as a whole. The wording came off awkwardly for me. It wasnt the wordt ive seen in here i suppose, just liked your other stuff better. :^)