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Thread: My RB. Life

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    My RB. Life

    Late August, no wait I remember, ‘was September
    Early in the month I became the newest contender
    And when I first signed vets were blind to my style
    Unkind with their criticism, and this lasted a while
    But as the weeks compiled, my wording progressed
    And critiques became mild as more time, id invest
    I even impressed myself, when reading my best
    Leaps and bounds is how id round up my quest
    To convalesce and progress to a standard up there
    Where?… no less than “yes, this guy’s got flare”
    But debonair is my goal and im not fully enrolled
    So I continue to unfold and reshape my mould
    Until im told… “Dev, your skill’s second to none”
    So ive gone from crew to crew, but not to abscond
    Or con, jus to find the one that suites my ground
    First I found, well founded CV, but that drowned
    So I looked around… and a couple more passed by
    I tried them out, no doubt, but then id spread and fly
    Then I settled in ‘Creation’, no hating, I won’t lie
    But now its good bye… cos an atmosphere grew
    Between two, and he knows who…yes, so fuck you!
    And its true, the skill wasn’t lacking, it’s attacking
    Hijacking others with respect due… but im laughing
    Cos Internet rapping, should be more light hearted
    So I departed, now im in soft focus, ive jus started
    And ive marked it as a family im gonna stick with
    Its my fifth and final… no there wont be a sixth
    It’s my concluding chapter… and this is the prefix!




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    *Applaud* Nice one Dev...

    This piece here was nice...very nice...a lot of emotion thrown all over this piece...Not how i approached it when i tried it...i was like...

    "When i first started off they wanted my content to be complex..."
    "ELEETE your flows too plain you need to come with that bomb text..."
    "You need better wordplay...and your vocab lacked..."
    You need to go back in the lab an take your whole rap back!..."

    More an angrier approach...you seemed calm in yours...I liked that...You explained yourself very thorough...Your story telling was real good as well...Along with your imagery of the things that you accomplished...Good work Devy Dev...Peace...

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    Dope verse man......flowed nicley throughout...the ending was sweet as well....just over all solid from begining to end....When i started with RB i started doing poetry and quickly gained status...i think i had 150 posts and i was a mod....but i know that tons of cats in here can relate to what your saying....dope piece

    done
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    while you write to rapbattles I perform on stage

    How's it feel to lack in comparison?............

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    This was okay.. not great. N' im not going to say this
    was dope because anyone of us who have been here
    for a year or more, which i mean you haven't even
    been here that long.. but ne one of us can sit down for
    10 minutes and write a piece on how we were wack
    when we came here, n' got doper.. n' name all the crews
    we were in.. i mean come on. Who wants to know that
    i came here in April, was in the elements, alliance,
    parental advisory, the productions, regime, n' eclipse.
    This wasn't bad, writing wise n' shit. But idk, my opinion.
    I just think writing your "internet life story" on a rap site
    is someone retarded...

    not a bad piece tho

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    man, people like you are jus stupid.... i was bored and key'd this up... i know anyone can write about it... guess how, cos im not stupid... you think too much of yourself thats your problem... i know this aint brilliant, but hey, who gives a fuck... i did it to fill in some time.. im not trying to get the fucka published.... but no beef
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    Think Im to full of myself? riight
    comin from the person who made a thread about his "RB Life"

    be real. Joking or not.

    I'm not tryint to discourage you. I complimented on your
    writing even, so dont give me that. I just said the topic
    is played out n' ne one can do it. So just take a breather

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    i wasnt trying to cause shit.... jus saying that theres no need for the negativity... i read many many OM's that are played out.... but that dont mean there not worth reading.... k
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    lol..bye creation...hello SF
    good move there

    so yea...i liked the flow on this, very easy to read and it comes off the tounge well...vocab was average, if that..i never noticed you useing alot so its not a bad thing, this wasnt hurt by it in anyway
    no real flaws here...good job

    with you and deacon together..HF might now be 3rd best topical

    lol, i just upped a few old OMs by me, check one out

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    thnx TR... ill go hit yours up... hope you dont disapoint me... lol

    .. and 3rd.. wtf.. so who are the first 2?

    lmao
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    Quote Originally Posted by Dev
    thnx TR... ill go hit yours up... hope you dont disapoint me... lol

    .. and 3rd.. wtf.. so who are the first 2?

    lmao
    insomniacs
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    i see... so what about *cough* creation....
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    yeah this was without question your most simplistic post that i've seen, not a bad thing it was still dope just more simplistic then what i'm used to. But the flow was still concrete and dope, one day i'll drop an open mic again so you can say how lovely and flawless it is.

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    lol.. coo man... im jus key.n shit up these days for OM, sonce i get no replies hardly
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    Liked this alot. Told a story of how you came from a noob up to a vet. Really liked how you portrayed how you came up. And or course i liek the part bout reppin SF

    Word nice stuff man. Flowed well, kinda simplistic, but none the less a great one.
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    nice job bro...good overall job...nice imagery

    it started off good

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