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Thread: Formula - Have You Ever ?

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    Formula - Have You Ever ?



    You look in the mirror to try to change what isn`t there
    Your inner demons are seeping and you get hella scared
    Well aware, of the consequences and reprecussions
    All this, bluffing and fussing has your head on a rush and
    Have you ever felt your parents were against you instead
    Of w/ you . . .
    Rather than fighting, you`re crying, cussing yourself to sleep in bed
    It`s hard I know, have you ever felt like the last one standing?
    The last one demanding a hand in your future planning
    Everybody else always has something to say
    It`s something today, nothing the next
    Then it`s back to fronting for pay
    You`ve been hungry for days, you wish upon a falling star
    To be what you want to be w/out changing who you are
    Believe in a dream and you`ll acheive just look at me
    Look and be, inspired to consieve a belief
    In yourself, please retrieve your things, lead, and suceed

    [Chorus]
    Have you ever... Had these types of deep thoughts and
    You`re tossing and turning w/ these burning questions in ya head
    Images dipicted of better living, and reaching the pinacle
    Whole world mentions you, but you`re the opposite of cynical
    `Cause someone may think shit identical, just work your hardest
    Whether you made it or want to make it. . .
    . . . I know you`ve had these thoughts regardless. . . .

    You ponder, about earth`s greatest creation, you wander
    Into love, but shit breaks up and you think it`s karma
    Every relationship in the past, hasn`t even made it passed
    A great length, and you wonder when you`ll find that one at last
    Have you ever asked why people can`t grasp the fact that
    You`re trapped against a wall, back strapped, open to get clapped
    Yep, you`re eyes on the streets again, and feet pretend
    To feel something deep within but they leave again
    Have you ever turned to weed again just to be your friend?
    "It`s me again", that`s your conscience talking w/ no end
    So you answer it, call it a fool, and keep doing what you`re doing
    Not knowing that what you`re doing will lead you to ruin
    Believe in the truth, shit, it may hurt, but it`s real
    And fuck a card game man, you have enough to deal
    With and sin`s rearing it`s ugly head, try to ignore it
    But have you ever felt the need to by any means explore it?

    [Chorus]

    Have you ever felt alone, cold, and out of place
    All your acquaintances have vanished w/out a trace
    You`re left w/ names, unable to put them to a face
    Life is a race, of 'Catch me if you can'. . . .
    . . . And you`re behind pace in the chase
    I know your struggling, often times stressed
    But what`s best is to look for guidance in your chest
    Follow your heart, never tear it apart, never give it a rest
    `Cause in that period, you could catch one through your vest
    Have you ever had the feeling of being there ?
    Attempt to travel, but you battle backwards back to nowhere
    Shackles provide the wear and tear, you think you shouldn`t care
    But when that happens, you`ll get more than breeze from air
    Just heed what I said, because what I`m helping you with
    Is the same shit I been through - Times two kid. . .



    Yeah, long, but one of my better ones, feedback appreciated.. leave links, and I`ll get to them. Pz.

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=126093
    Last edited by FormulaMC; April 23rd, 2004 at 05:47 PM Reason: I forgot to center it, bitch!

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    Flow was on point - your tone in this was very nice - first four lines were a nice way to open it - almost like a thesis statement - they set out the basis for the piece - saw some wordplay scattered here and there - vocab was decent - the first and last verses were stronger than the middle one - I liked the closing thought - but maybe a different wording would have been better - keep dropping - peace

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    well seeing aa this is going audio.. i made sure i read it to a beat.. and it seemed pretty smooth... it wasnt all consistant.. but jus added to the flow.. some bits seemed to speed up... as the scheme changed tempo.... i liked it.. a good length.. does it stretch to 3 minutes?.... yeah.. seemed like it will make a good audio... would have sounded even better if i knew the exact flow you spit it to... ~props~ are you doing the beat to? or using someone elses?
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    This was allright it had a nice flow to it and therefor it would be well suited to an audio peice, nice, had nice emotion into it, and i think maybe you should look into ur ryme scheme

    Anyways nice drop, can upeep the open mic in my sig pls, cheers
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