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Last edited by Neruda II; January 17th, 2005 at 04:44 PM
murder murder
This was alright. Really, you can`t do much with such a generic topic, there were a few lines that impressed me, though.
To communicate feelings with the tongue of a princewith beautiful, wonderful words that inspiration definesI think that is the goal of every writer, and you portrayed it rather eloquently. Decent job - next time, pick a more difficult/in depth topic.They'll apprehend that nirvana could be achieved in print
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murder murder
It was ok.. could be more complex in some places
but this was an ok piece, some decent imagery
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with beautiful, wonderful words that inspiration defines
I describe poems and rhymes that touch peoples lives
I generate tales that sometimes are not "compos mentis"
Tales I create like an orgasm that leaves you breathless
Reform to make the action from my life fit inspiration
Perform finer art and flow better than lung's respiration
these lines were on point with your open mic
loving the topic flowed niced liking the direction you took it
liking the imagery could of did a little better but all and all
and nice peice keep droppin
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