10-20 lines
no dickriding
no crew votes
no bullsit
u spit first, i'll drop within 30 mins after you
good luck
Cjilla a.k.a Cj
wrightmak17
10-20 lines
no dickriding
no crew votes
no bullsit
u spit first, i'll drop within 30 mins after you
good luck
Alright here I go
This is a fairy tale so say hello to the villain,I can get arrested for any thing but hoe killing/If you taking drugs man I don't care what you be drilling/yo rap are like Hostass commercails they got no cream filling/So I say 1 o'clock 2 o'clock 3 o'clock rock when 4 roll around the rap don't stop/the way I dress some might mistake me for a crook/Man you probly get ya rhymes from a Dr Seuss book/See after this rhyme I don't know how long you'll be lasting if money was food n****you would be fasting/So RB say hey to new found rookie/my raps make hungry so get some milk and cookies/30 minutes aint enough to save you from Jilla/ So take ya time/write a ryhme and try to the Rap battle killa/Ive been hungry to battle so when I heard of you I made Haste/I been battleing other n***** but they would'nt to my tatse/So thats my verse and I would like to bid farewell/Cause when entered a Battle wit Jay/You then entered a battle in Hell
Vote Cjilla RB
ay sorry man, but i really gotta go, we move the deadline to tomorrow nite, and if u want we can go another round, but somethin came up and i really gotta go, sry man
Its cool try to do it to nite if u can/I could go another round but that means you'll have to do two verses
aright man i'm back, i'll start this shit off, here it goes
u prolly killed yo momma since u bragged about killin hoes
why u talkin shit, sayin i got my rhymes from dr seuss?
u prolly went to the library, got ya rhymes from mother goose
yo verse aint had no structure...... it was all over tha place
how u gonna write like that, did u get sprayed in tha face with mace?
come battle me u get crumbled like sampson when he crumbled the pillers
damn jilla, your verse wath pathetic, sorry, lame and full of bad fillers
you wack, off track, so stop talkin bout killin and how many gunz u pack
u gon be lookin back, and u'll ask why you tried to mess wit wrightmak
line ten, i'm flyin, just tryin to keep this dopeness goin
i know i won, and when u gone, you it was nice knowin
im sick, i got an inch on my dick for every verse that i spit
i'm quick when i pick how much i wanna merk u with this shit
u get no chicks, only time u get pussy is when u finger yourself
im a ladies man, u just sit around and do nothin like a book on a shelf
the line about messin with wrightmak, i kinda used from a different battle
different rhymes, but in that battle tha other dumass didnt poll it so i think it aright if i recycle it
Wow. i'm not going to vote..
But Wrightmak17 should be getting his first win here.
Cjilla work on punches & structure
Along with everything else
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come on people, votin aint that hard
just give us some votes
Ok.. since no one voting
I guess i will!
Cjilla aka Cj - your verse was basically an edited paragraph. No structure what so ever, and then every time you went to swear.. you had it **'d out.. shits gay, work on punches, structure, vocab, wittyness, ect. Work on everything
Wrightmak17 - your verse was actually decent this time. Your punches were there, but not that well developed. They need to be harder hitting. Work on your personals to, that usually helps. Overall.. you came decent, but you murdered this kid. Lol, this is going to be your first win!
V/Wrightmak17
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CJ- ur verse needs alot of work. ur punches were garbage, i hated da one about da hostess. no personels. ur structure and flow was garbage, every hear of revise and edit nucca. and another thing, i really dont like da line with, "1 o'clock 2 o'clock 3 o'clock rock" thats just gay.
WrightMak17- u spoke da truth about CJs verse," pathetic, sorry, lame and full of bad fillers" thats what it was. ur punches were aight and harder than his. personels ok. ur flow and structure was good and understandable.
vote: Wright Mak17
Da KiD iS iN dA FoRuM BUiLdInG!!!!!!!!!!!!
I know I need work WrightMak if we battle again I promise I gonna bring the heat Peace good battle
Uppin people ^^^^^^^^ VOTE!
and cj, if u wanna go again, i'll merk you again, it's up to you
ok last time im gonna up
just leave some votes, please
Pretty good battle homeys!
Cjilla had some good punches and personals but some strange structure and flow was a little bit off. Concepts worked but seemed played out at times. You had a few multis but nothing incredible. I enjoyed reading your verse though. Kinda humorous at times.
Wrightmak17 you had some ill comebacks 2 the lyrics that cjilla hit you up with! You had good structure and flow. You were creative and your punches and personals hit well. I admired your concepts! Especially your star line. This was your star line why u talkin shit, sayin i got my rhymes from dr seuss?
u prolly went to the library, got ya rhymes from mother goose
Good battle guys
Vote/ Wrightmak17
I'll go again
Alright First time was pratice this shits the real deal/I not giving up I was born to kill/Wrigthmak you hardly got a nut sack/ dick so little you harldy flip a ant on its back/Ypu thought i got murked i think you need to unlossen your bra and take yo skirt/jilla then then rose from the the dead so son i suggest you run/What im a talkin bout sun You then sucked more dick then sammy sosa then hit HOme runs/You won nigga you ain't even close when you see this vesre you gonna think you seen a fuckin ghost/wrightMak get the fuckin facts Im takin this battle and puttin yo ass back on track
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