flash |vs| freshouttaafrica

[lyricallyabbusiv]

wow....flash merked fresh...weak battle...but flash takes this one easily...
flash- sturcture was off, flow waz iight, and punches were ok...u really didnt need 2 go hard at all...u culdve won with basic punches...
fresh- ur verse waz overall weak, no flow, struc wayyyy off,,,,,,,,punches weak as hell.......and overall ya shit waz weak man...no hate ......there is really no need 4 any explanations......
vote- flash for a better overall verse
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...84#post1298084
plze hit that up....

[-Suspect-]

pretty much what lyric said
this battle wasnt to great
flash was pretty good
i liked the part bout the mc donalds that cracked me up
fresh- ur structure and flow was wack as
u going on bout africa and 'nigga' to much

v/ flash

yo return the favour flash
and dont be a fag and accually do it!!
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...1&page=1&pp=15

[SmokaJoka]

iv been known to stimulate ya body and mind...like an enhancer \
couldnt key-mo better lines then me, if you was diagnosed wit cancer \ (kemo therapy)
Ha...actually pretty decent
I make-doom , to shake-you , i think this girl will break-soon \
your lyrics is hella weak, like anorectics in the weight-room \
Played
my lyrics will break ya neck, but for real, get better in yo rehearsal \
you loosen and im "loven it" more then the mcdonalds comercial \
Decent
im assulting you, and thats resulting to, a broken hip and misplaced jaw \
i'll chop ya body up, and leave it in my freezer, then you can say that you raw \
...No
the only gun you saw was in toys-r-us, you got a crew, then im a get ya man-next \
but homie im right, ya shit couldnt be tight, if ya took a dump in spandex
Decent

Overall:
You relied mostly on metaphors...and they all seemed to do a pretty well decent job....none of them were entirely played or out of date...pretty good...just concentrate on more direct hits....

Ok Ok Ok Ok This nigga want it okay/
dont you know I spit for days, WHy you think they call me freshouttaafrica I got ya moms dying of fucking aids/
No...mom punches are not dissing him
you you know when i spit im sick in the place/
keep fucking wit me my ethopian flies to starve ya ass and stick to ya fuckin face/
No
you thinkin you seein me you fuckin retart/
ask JAMIE FOXX we dont do drive bys with guns we do it with POISONOUS DARTS/
^that was a funny stand up
in ya verse i didnt know wtf you were talking about really though/
Im bout to dig up KUNTA KINTE so he can grab his Spear and have ya chest out like BIzzare in the my band video/
No
Listen with me yo you'll neva last/
i got elephants that'll come through and ram ya ass/
Ok...

Overall:
you came quite horribly...and you didnt make one direct diss to your opponent...honestly you need to work on structure and better metaphors....

Vote - flash

[Trogdor]

Flash, u had a few punches and a few personals, thats what made u win this battle. but u lacked lfow and structure.......dont use // it makes it look newbish and ugly. despite that i can see u elivating, be more complex and creative, bust funny lines too to get our attention, and use metaphors and similes


Other dude, awful verse, no personals punches simles metas etc. you have alot to learn, visit the RB help place thing, you need to be more creative. and dont use fake personals, they are sooooo played. and that finisher.......elephants? wtf man lol......anyway elivate.

Vote: Flash

Please hit up my battle at the top of frontlines Flash since ur hte only dude who can pol, tanks

[lyricallyabbusiv]

both structures were fuked up....

flash- wak structure..lol...ok punches..ok flow...not best form u...weakest battle ive seen so far...notin interesting about it...but ya punches stood out...soem of them....

fresh- wak...structure wak...punches weak..flow was offfff...and thats all that i can say...your shit was weak man...overall- your punchews needed more creativity...more engaging...ur whole verse was blah...weak shit man..elevate....

vote- flash...easy win...
plze return favor...on mah attle wi lil hood....