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    Love - 2 - Hate!

    Love to Hate


    Isnt it funny how easily love turns into pure hate
    one minute you can be kissing , next you begin frustrate
    your lover, then you push and shove her without any regret
    you feel like a man, but you havnt done anything manly yet
    why not stop the charades and phony acts
    look back on the past and face the facts
    even her sub-concience and eternal sleep was against you
    she thought and dreamt about other guys , that you never knew
    that's why you love to hate her , it feels so good
    its one of the emotions, man has never understood
    quite well enough to know whats its directive
    maybe to release endorphines is its objective
    to relieve the pain that love has brought
    hate is all a persons ever had to sought
    after in a time of crisis where wounds sumtimes scar
    much worse then even being hit by a fast car
    love is ment to be true but it makes you blue
    hate is a privilage that is only known by a few
    it feels so great but wats better is wen u get irate
    so fuk love the whole fukin trend is over
    better to hate and be mad at your lover.

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    nice job man. i felt sum of those lines. here are the ones i thought stood out:

    your lover, then you push and shove her without any regret
    you feel like a man, but you havnt done anything manly yet

    that's why you love to hate her , it feels so good
    its one of the emotions, man has never understood

    ^dope. nice little quotables. the only thing ur verse had trouble with was the way it kept switchin its scheme. it mixed up the flow a little, but overall, this was a really nice read. i enjoyed even the meaning of it. props man.

    could you plz hit this battle up with a vote in return:

    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=119515

    thanx.

    peace

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    Nice piece.... I liked your meaning and you had some dope lines...

    I liked the ones Ace named and:

    love is ment to be true but it makes you blue
    hate is a privilage that is only known by a few

    ... your only problem was the structure was a bit dodgy and your rhymes too simplistic... besides endorphines you had no really stand out vocab and no multies... try to work on those

    good luck and keep writing

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    ^^^^ thanx for the feedbak ace and wogzta UPP ....keep em comien ppl and if u post a comment i'll reply on an open mic of your just leve the link at the bottom of ur post thanx peace.

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    this shits hot son

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    ^^^ no freeposting or i'll report you please real comments needed thanx peace.

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    UPPIN - intelligent reviews need thanx so please post if u read this.

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    This shit is so true dawg.........Im in a fucking slump right now with my girl so i relate to this entire topic easily...I feel like fuckin Exploding right about now.......great piece....really made me think about things as i see them right now....Good job UD.....peace

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    ^ thanx for the kind words also this was based on my luv life aswell so its nice to see that someone else relates to this ..peace

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    what a surprise... this is actually descent... u need better vocabulary.. seriously... but besides that this isnt bad.. not bad at all and im being serious.. i love the topic but you could have easlily took the time to explain it further.. well its still good.. but you could have done this better

    nice

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    HoF x5

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    ^^^ thanx for the postive feedback come on ppl i need intelliegent reviews and comments so if u read this please drop a reply thanx ...peace

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    Man it was fluent like the tittle says Love to hate....i couldnt really think of a way to improve this piece besides the vocab the rest was banging nice work man.

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    ^^^ thanx man that made my day.....UPPIN

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    think you rolled with the topic ok... but your struecture and bar length needs working on... it seriously knocked the flow... a balance of syllables helps alot for the flow... yours seemed to lack this... other than that and your use of vocab... not bad... some of ya content was good... jus work on it...
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