X-Plicit vs Adept

[And Death]

no crew
no bite
no recycle
no d.r.
no hate

u spit first

[...Adept...]

Nah Dawg Blind Spit I'm Not What You Think I am....

[...Adept...]

::: *Faggit-Textcee*!! I'm *Dominant*.. Cuz U *Owned-By-Humanity*!! Adept Will *Fuck Ya Mind* Like U Had Intercourse With A *Moment-Of-Clarity*!!…
::: *Punch-This-Lame*.. Ya Wacc, My *Lines-Are-Pain*!! Put A End To Ya Repetitive Style* Cause All Ya *Rhymes-The-Same* :::
::: *Skin-This-Racist*.. I'm Too *Sick-To-Be-Hated*!! I *Ejactulate On These Newbies*.. To Show Em To *Stick-To-The-Basics*!! :::
:::Ya *Spits-A-Waste* Adepts The General*.. Known To *Split-Ya-Face*!! Ur Just Like Dopey-Police-Officers Known To *Miss-The-Chase*!!..
::: I *Aim-An-Blast* Leave This MC’S Frames-In-A-Cast Against me ull *Risk-Ya-Ribs*!! Cause Adepts Nothin To Play-Wit Like *Autistic Kids*!!..
::: *Tearin-Words-In-Ya-Name*.. *Scared-In-Church-N-In-Vein*!! Cuz *Adept Leave You Hidden More*.. Than The *Characters-In-Ya-Name*!! :::
::: Battle Me?*.. ull *Wonder-Ur-Life* *Folding-Wit-Hits* !! Rotating A Color-Printer Only Time U Really Holding-A-Cartridge!!..

[And Death]

I went over 10 lines but fucked it...you did too

Battling in front of a mirror wouldn't double his luck
His chance of winning is like a pornstars career...fucked
Tattooing his name on a virgin pussy, only way he'd be tight
I'd tell this guy to blow me...but he just might
I'm fed up with these netcee gangsta wannabes talkin' shit
Even with his mouth full of saliva he couldn't spit
Either this boy is stupid or a mental retard
Cuz if his dick was frozen he still couldn't cum hard
Adept wouldn't have a clear thought if I sprayed Windex on his brain
He hit bakerkid89 wit' a window and then said he felt the pane
If this kid wrote in brail his verse still wouldn't be felt
Cuz he capitalizes on mistakes more than how where he's from is spelt
Just like newborns walkin', Adept's prone to take a fall
He gets shit on more than toilets in public washroom stalls
I used Coppertone on my verse so sunning me is impossable
Adept means skilled in all areas but you're an exception of the rule

[And Death]

Uppin on this (1)...

I'll return the favor, leave a link.

[ILLunatic]

...Adept... all the :::*-*::: shit made the verse look ugly! Honestly, it made everything bunched together! Flow was decent, some places could use work.
Vocab was good in some places, others it was poor.

X-Plicit Structure was a little off. Punches were a little soft, but honestly.. i'd say you pulled this one off. Not that much though, but a few of your punches did connect.
Thats mainly the only reason you got this

V/X-Plicit

[b.r. hustla]

xplicit goodpunches
adept ya words were all bunched and stupid

my vote xplicit

[And Death]

^ya never poll voted.

uppin (2)................

[JaE_Muah]

::: *Skin-This-Racist*.. I'm Too *Sick-To-Be-Hated*!! I *Ejactulate On These Newbies*.. To Show Em To *Stick-To-The-Basics*!! :::
:::Ya *Spits-A-Waste* Adepts The General*.. Known To *Split-Ya-Face*!! Ur Just Like Dopey-Police-Officers Known To *Miss-The-Chase*!!.. vote=adept

[JaE_Muah]

::: *Skin-This-Racist*.. I'm Too *Sick-To-Be-Hated*!! I *Ejactulate On These Newbies*.. To Show Em To *Stick-To-The-Basics*!! :::
:::Ya *Spits-A-Waste* Adepts The General*.. Known To *Split-Ya-Face*!! Ur Just Like Dopey-Police-Officers Known To *Miss-The-Chase*!!.. vote=adept

[JaE_Muah]

::: *Skin-This-Racist*.. I'm Too *Sick-To-Be-Hated*!! I *Ejactulate On These Newbies*.. To Show Em To *Stick-To-The-Basics*!! :::
:::Ya *Spits-A-Waste* Adepts The General*.. Known To *Split-Ya-Face*!! Ur Just Like Dopey-Police-Officers Known To *Miss-The-Chase*!!.. vote=adept

[Karl Merks]

Adept- It looked like one of those live journal things. I didn't even consider giving you the win. Fortunately I ended up reading.

Adept Will *Fuck Ya Mind* Like U Had Intercourse With A *Moment-Of-Clarity*!!…

I liked that for whatever reason.

Working on your structure and flow would help you alot.

X-Plicit-

Put A End To Ya Repetitive Style* Cause All Ya *Rhymes-The-Same

Ironically Adept had a point there. Alot of played sex refrences and forced punches. I'd advise you from using cum lines in the future as they've become played.

I used Coppertone on my verse so sunning me is impossable

Good idea, it could've been worded better though.


Vote- Ad- Better overall.

[And Death]

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[UNDEAD.]

MY VERDICT

Adept-Your verse was weak and u just said anything that came to ur head that rhymed and it didnt make much sense thats why ur flow was off-key and ur structure was off dunt use * to show where the rhymes are ppl arnt stupid they'll be able to figure it out and if they cant thats ur fault for not writeing clearly. this was a below average performance from you but since ur a newb its understandable but keep trying.

X-Plicit-good shit u had a lot of good punches and a few good personals nice flow and good structure your only let down was too many puches and not enoguh attacks but still good. you used more wit and humour to take this. you should try out for the 1-2 punch line league youd probably get in. but keep up da good shit comein.

Flow: X-Plicit
Strucuture: X-Plicit
Punches: X-Plicit
attacks: X-Plicit
Multies: Adept

MY VOTE: X-Plcit

[And Death]

Thanks for the vote

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