16 lines
3-0 KO
4-1 TKO
16 lines
3-0 KO
4-1 TKO
checkin' in yo
iight im checkin in but in the battle thread u said 20 lines
fuck it 20 but juss drop i'm tired dammit
I'll take his lips and re-attach them to his ass, now what he spits is truely gassed/
Imma bout' to peel this herb like he was a clove of grisley old garlic/
strip him of his man-hood cuz killaconcept acts feminine like a harlot/
bout' to rip-this-jacker, this text show's that killaconcept is-a-slacker/
'n' after this, all that's gonna be left is fecal-matter from his abandoned-bladder/
flatten-his-chest 'n' slip two internal-beat-seekin' bullets in-his-vest/
electro-magnetic's shutdown pace-makers deliverin' a text-message of a cartiac-arrest/
this guys not an actor, he shouldn't even be allowed to express his thoughts/
stencil-trace his awful-face 'n' play a game of connect the crucially vital dots/
I incorporate hollow-tip bullets with edible-aluminum, so it's easier for u to consume-them/
better make enough room-for-them, cuz like Duke Nukem, there's a hint of Doom in-them/
this next line will amp-u-tate and leave u limb-less, instant para-pelegic once you read-it/
even if this battle was over and u won this match, u still wouldn't be able to "Beat This"/
I'm about to release this curtain caller to ure head and severly de-heat it/
like falsely led Alpha-centurian's, I'll have you dyin' to meet this/
kill just swallowed some cerpintine 'n' now this situation is worsening'/
collapsed metal from a guillotine strikes swiftyly 'n' will momentarily sting/
u beat off so much that the only thing that gets errect 'n' stiff anymore is ure finger/
If u count all the times you've lost, that's the source of the smell of defeat that alway's lingers/
okay just hurry up and drop so we can get these vote's poppin in this already
hello uppin come on killa please ... i wanna get the verse dropped before i got to sleep
-okay-
i spit facts/and break backs/cuz ill flow is what u lack/
i shake cats/u get slapped/and it'll be a overstatement to say that ur whack/
cuz i'll beat u on tha street and i'll murder u on the stage/
and i'll punch ya head into ya back and lock u into ya ribcage/
it's get's even sadder/cuz ya flow is equivelant to disinergrated matter/
i'll leave u clapped,slapped,capped,smacked,fractured and tattered/
i'll plaster this bastard/shootin' so far cuz the aim is terrific/
have the helicopters and coastguards searchin' the pacific/
leave u open on some sick shit/and u won't survive my attack/
this kid must be on crack/he expect's people to "rip his ass"...........
^^^^that's why he wears his boxers to the back
my lyrics could phisically bring pain/
till it feels like u were fucked by 8 gays in the ane/
rip thru ya frame/spit 2 bullitz @ ya face/
Concepz juss ate this kid..........OOPS I FORGOT TO SAY GRACE/
-Concepz bows his head-
while shortay's lifeless rotten carcass lays there bleedin'/
and thanks god for the food he just finished recievin'/
Opener - Eh.. neither were liked
Punches - nino
Wordplay - Killa
Personals - Neither
Structure - nino (some stretched lines though)
Multies - Neither
Finisher - nino
nino Decent punches.. could use work, Structure wasn ok. a few stretched lines here and there. In need of flow, wordplay, & harder punches. overall its was decent.
Killa - Yet again.. weak structure, wordplay was good.. just not the set up
Punches were weak, in need of Punches, structure, and creativity.
V/Nino
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[qoute]Killa - Yet again.. weak structure, wordplay was good[/quote]
lol...yet again...lmao ...uppin for more votes
bump.........
bump................please................dont sleep on this
uppin............................................. .1x
uppin .................................................. ...3x
nine that was 5 ups.. i don't get what you newbies don't get about ups.. an up is any post that isnt ur check in or verse. up the battle again and you are dq'd.
anyway , all that aside...
i thought killa took this because his verse was more direct.
what do i mean by that? his shit wasn't stretched a mile long to get the point across.
his shit wasn't that good, but at least i could read the line and not strain to find the rhyme. nino, use a normal structure... making the words all small isnt fooling anyone.. we know its stretched to fuck, and it makes it EVEN harder to read with it all small..
read other peoples battles, and you guys will realize a lot of stuff here was played like a couple years ago. umm... also, don't use any lines including body parts.. theyre all played.
vote - killa
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