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Thread: If You Blink You'll Miss It

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    If You Blink You'll Miss It

    Unless you’re a rich kid, if you blink you’ll miss it
    Go from a delinquent in an instant to years of black listed
    Being tight fisted cos you passed the opportunities blind
    Now confined to dry biscuits instead of caviar and wine
    And champagne all the time… dining at the five stars
    Cos the choices you get come few and far… between
    Narrow slots of a dream, in the vast of nightmares
    A silent voice in the spiel… all the same its still there
    To unreel the awaiting flare… if it’s grasped when it’s found
    But A profoundly small hatch is has to the £’s
    So don’t drown in the waters, ride the wave of success
    Be brave, daring, not a benefit slave… a phoney address
    To invest, or shake the tax man again, another month
    That’s what I call ‘fucked up’… id prefer the steak lunch
    The 20’s, not counting pennies, look… when down to the crunch
    It’s your hunch and gut feeling, and believing, that prospers
    Fuck impostors and dossers… it’s a dossier of bad call
    Cos the options in life’s roster are what stops the fall
    That Keep people enthralled… with their sights set high
    Hoping one day it’ll hit them like a bolt from the sky
    Why wont it, im not joking… don’t subscribe… It won’t reply
    So keep ya retina open, and defy the stacked odds
    Its dog eat dog, so if you’re a cat, all your getting is flogged
    Absurd, yes, but its fact, any chance I get im gonna take it
    Don’t wanna be the guy trapped in the past… who’s life’s wasted



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    iight..

    Opener was nice.. Smooth transitions.. Vocabulary was nice, and wasnt over-done..

    Maybe you could of made your transitions more consistent through-out the piece.. As I feel they fell off towards the end of the piece..

    Was a nice piece, my man..

    Now stop sleepin', hoes..

    Hit something with my name on.. Any forum.. Dont matter..

    Thanks..

    Pz..

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    Nice work Devvy...<<--Beat That

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    lmao.... i will next time....
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    Yo that was some real dope, I was feeling it, nice drop man, fo real. loved the opeining, that was dope, very nice drop, keep it up

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    thnx... blah blah
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    Flow was nice - Vocab good - good closing line - liked your contrast lines:
    "Now confined to dry biscuits instead of caviar and wine"
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    "Its dog eat dog, so if you’re a cat, all your getting is flogged"

    don't use symbols - especially with the small font. Stayed on topic throughout with making your point. Nice drop - hit my Mag collab on the media if you get a chance. If you could vote on my topical battle in Elite it would be greatly appreciated as well.

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    I'm dead.


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    Hence Forward

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    Good topic here..seen before but executed well
    Good, straight structure..I liked tha flow to this
    I liked how you switched it up and mixed it up
    Giving it to us raw..I like that...pz

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    WhatThatLookLike..?!

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    dis was a real good piece ...decent vocab.....your flow was good..kept me reading.....nice imagery....all in all good drop....
    hit dis link up plzz
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    yeah.... upp
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    might aswell upp this shit... no fucka else will
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    Nice piece, good vocab, good flow, nice structure; same bar lengths. Smooth transitions from bars and nice multies. I have no advice for improvement. Niceness.
    can I kick it?

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    upp...
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    reply... or ill diss your shit...lol
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    ^^Oh in that case allow me to reply quickly!! LOL. For some reason i never see your shit Dev (Are you the "D" in BBD? is the Dev short for Devo?Don't lie) but your work is always good,

    Nice flow, and imagery in this joint. Good job overall and when can i expect a reunion of New Edition and the East Coast Family?

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