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30 min time limit
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You Spit First
and i am Checkin in
Twiztid_Soul
puertoricanelly
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30 min time limit
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you might be puerto rican// but english is something your not speakin//
its not seepin// but im creepin// are you ready to battle// if not set back in that saddle// and watch a P.I.M.P do his work but please do not jerk-----off //cuz i'll be ready to take----off //cuz im not a faggot like some// that likes to swallow cum// like a desperate bum// on the streets with no money to eat// so they decide to unzip and give you a treat// thats the only taste you got //cuz you dont got and taste in hip hop// you act like you can rap but you can not// so you better just stop
my bad dawg its not the greatest but i couldnt think and i only had 30 min so what the fuck drop a flow
this battles hocus pocus and im puttin you in the pot//
ill leave ya in their just to see your body rot//
i might sound sick but its how i get down//
your up ta bat but ill drop you at the mound//
this aint a game we dont play we blast wit guns//
expose your lungs, and leave yo blood spillin by the tons//
schyciatric hospital is where i leave my patients//
hoping that youll live but poison is whats in my medications//
a battle so mismatched shouldve neva begun//
twiztid soul ned to rb your record is now O and 1!!!!
damn dawg that was sick uppin votes and mad props good job homie
thanks man you pretty koo jus word on how you set your lines, dont leave umm long like that its bad for votes, but you pretty kool wit cha back to back rhymes big ups!
ayo nelly ill vote in herr if u vote on my battle herr's the link,
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=118714
iight line from nelly:
i might sound sick but its how i get down//
your up ta bat but ill drop you at the mound//
this aint a game we dont play we blast wit guns//
expose your lungs, and leave yo blood spillin by the tons//
line from tiwista:
but im creepin// are you ready to battle// if not set back in that saddle// and watch a P.I.M.P do his work but please do not jerk-----off //cuz i'll be ready to take----off
breakdown:
flow:nelly
structure:nelly
punchlines:nelly
enjoy reading nelly
overall vote and poll vote goes to .......................PR NELLY
PLEASE RETURN THE FAVOR IN ANY OF MY BATTLES THANK U
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twiztid- elevate. all you had was a bunch of lame rhymes here in there. try gettin better man. 3/10 and fix that structure
Puerto- pretty nice. the flow was top notch. the punches hit wit ease and you were consistent with disses. very nice. you took this battle with pretty much every line. you coulda had just 2 bars and you woulda got my vote. keep at it. 8/10
vote- Puerto...for actually having a punch in this.
alright. hit this up in return plz:
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=119176
thanx.
peace
Twizted ~ About the only thing you had working for you, maybe, was your flow. rhymes were basic ..didnt see wordplay or many personals..and dont worry bout the 30 min time limit thing..after lots of battles you'll learn to do fine in that amount of time..in fact u'll find yourself gettin finished before 30 lol..
Puerto ~ Nice stuff man, only thing i suggest is that you dont break up your bars in 2's..i used to do that and got a lotta hits on the structure..at least here at RB they arent to fond of it. Again, didnt see any wordplay or multis...but you did ok..enough to take this...
Vote: Puerto
plz hit this back, thanks..
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=119218
Not the most impressive battle i've ever seen but here's the breakdown:
Twizted: Your structure was bade and your rhymes were lame. You need to elevate cuz your shit was simple. Basically no punches, wordplay, multis, or metas
Puertorican: Punches were pretty decent. You stayed consistent with your rhymes and good flow. The first bar was kinda shitty for startin out your drop. Not bad overall. Put a twist on your shit and bring it up to the next level.
Hypothetical vote goes to puertorican (sorry only 75 posts!)
got enough posts now so I'm hittin this up w a vote. PR gets my vote.. explanation above...... hit up links in my siggy (most recent is battle with Thing)
Wow at how old this battle is, anyhow, vote nelly, for actually having punches, some of which were decent, and having better structure and flow in the verse, twisted verse had terrible noobish structure, and there were no real punches in his verse, and being that punches when battles, and nelly was the only one that had em in this battle, he takes the win, this wasnt a very good battle though, nelly work on comin up with harder hittin, more witty punches. The other guy prolly hasnt been back since, so theres no point in givin him advise 1
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