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Thread: Love for a Brother

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    Love for a Brother

    Love for a Brother

    As I reflect upon my past my mind dwells amidst our memories
    An over-looked relation beheld by enforced parental remedies
    A narrative that began since birth to end in the hands of time
    Enhanced between the pages to exist without a chance in line


    Subsequent to my birth, a child was conceived amongst a family
    Both parents eroding their own lives and on the verge of insanity
    Uncannily channeled through ones mind, he grew up in isolation
    Only to be changed in a couple of years through God’s admiration
    So it was expected he’d be rejected among the peers of his generation
    Able to hold his own but still felt an absence of actual innate elation
    Then penetration was re-enacted between the mother and father of this
    The result was the image of my own reflection and just a brother of his

    Born two years before my own time, in a way he was my mentor
    So I pursued the direction he led, it’s what most parents intend for
    But there was a glitch in the system, my brother refused to let live
    Disagreed to my desires and blatantly disapproved each incentive
    Hence the paths became split; no further bond was being withheld
    I embraced the wrath of a loved one who didn’t care about how I felt
    Emotionally and physically incarcerated, I knew nothing but pain
    Wondering whatever happened to the laughter we both once obtained

    Nothings been corrected, we’ve yet to head back to where we started
    A change of heart hasn’t be made, we’re left where our paths departed
    A foundation of hatred, cemented by unfermented broken emotions
    Reparation seems impossible; there’re no more words to be spoken
    What was once a relationship held by our parents no longer exist
    Left as a memory is the few good moments of when we were kids
    A lifetime of regrets and thoughts about what should matter most
    On top of that is family even though it sometimes seems that it don’t

    They say sometimes people are too young to love when in actuality
    Children are the only ones who hold a true sense of love’s fallacy

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    The threads that i replied to:

    'Lady Tramp'
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    cmon peepz. don't sleep on this plz.
    uppin for feedback

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    Wow.....i cant believe peeps are sleepin on this....this is pretty dope man....

    You flow and imagery were great man...like it...everything seemed to run so smoothly....you did a great job at telling the story and implimenting the pictures in my head...jobe well done

    I think what kept this piece alive was its simplicity...well written for this piece...and good approach...Lemme know if you ever drop something and need some feed...ill be more than happy to help out!

    Hit my latest piece up man...appreciate it!!
    The Inner Meaning
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=118968

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    ^thanx man. much appreciation. can i get some more feedback plz?

    thanx peepz.

    peace

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    uppin this playa verse. hit this up peepz. thanx bunches. lol
    peace

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    hahahaha. thanx for the feedback.
    i don't see why people refuse to give me some. it can't be that bad.

    peace

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    shit was mad hot nice structure good vocab nice scheme pure devotion from what i see stay up ~1~

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    DL LM VE RA THA ILLIST CREW'S EVER INVENTED TO VENT IT

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    ^thanx man. i really appreciate it. especially tha fact that you took the
    time to read it. keep it real.
    peace

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    dis was some crack shit dawg i aint gone front...dont know why its getting slept on...
    nice imagery i can jsut picture everything in my mind...
    only thing bad about dis is dat dis is an overused topic..but u brought something differtn to it..
    dats what made dis stand out...
    when u get a chance drop feed in "Perspective of the Ant" id appreciate it have pretty much no feed cuz u knowhow it is on here

    peace

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    thanx playah. much appreciation. i'll hit that up for sure.
    peace

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    yo dog, i know your just lightweight but your alright. nah actually, that was sum dope shit. i like the flow along with the rhymes. deep meaning that kept me thinking. props dog. this deserves a nomination. hey, we shuld maybe start a crew cuz i like your style, or at least collab sumtime. wut you think?

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    ^thanx dog. i see you're still rippin it. i'll think about that idea of yours. till then. keep it real.
    peace

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    that shyt mad hot i liked the multies
    that was really dope son
    the flow was great ...the structure everything seemed to fit together like a puzzle and i really thought that shyt was mad ill son rate it a 10/10
    mad props son good job

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    ^thanx man. much appreciation for taking the time to
    read this.......................
    ......
    peace

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