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Thread: Greatest fear ( quick but very deep)

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    Greatest fear ( quick but very deep)

    only way I could write this is when I thought real quick. This shit is deep to me so if i try take more time it hurts.. This was just a quick key enjoy::

    Waking up earlier than the sun, to great another day
    something deep is telling me to run, but i have to stay
    mind is sencing evil has begun, but i cant visualise the potray
    Stumbling of the bed like I weigh a ton, like a zombee I stroll
    the refreshing splash of water, makes me regain my controll
    today smells on silence, a deathening sound echos through the place
    but I stroll to the tv, with a mysterious feeling reflection on my face

    Something is lerking, and I can sence this feeling all round
    My sister eyes are smerking, looking to the ground
    Cant take this no more, Everyone here lives their own existance
    what has life got in store, this family has no substance
    I looked at her with appriciation, to get nothing but hate in return
    that sets of my own anger, and my heart starts to burn
    Arguments are born , all the aggresion stops the old man snoring
    the days already been torn, and this is just the morning

    An hour has ticked by, with silence acting as hate
    mum the only good soul, has yet to awake....
    but all we want is our boul, shes just there to serve and cook
    but her gentle soul, could be turned into a childrens book
    our calls are unanswered, as my moms rooms bring silence
    old man is angry,I could sence him rammbling quiet violence

    My sister went to awake mother, But in return all we got was a scream
    I connected eyes with father, like we knew what my sister has seen
    My greatest fear was awaken, as my mom was there but her soul was gone
    for a second my life just twirled, i wasnt sure if i was ever born
    three of us set around the bed, all stunned into tremendous crys
    for the first time ever holding hand, knowing we just lived lies
    Mothers eyes so dead, but still watchin us all together
    i wanted to call the ambulance, but my legs felt like feathers
    I died that day , becaouse my greatest fear really lived to the reputation
    I love my mother, but I never showed her my appreciation
    And now I was to late, only if i could turn back time and express
    I loved her more than anything, but caoused her the most stress


    This fear controlls my life, but I still treat mama like nothing
    Whenever I have an outburst, She takes it as a poisonus sting
    But i dont change, my brain speaks but my mouth doesnt hear
    And everyday , through my head runs my biggest fear.....

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    Good job. I didnt enjoy it at first cuz its slow.

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    Quote Originally Posted by $CRaWDaWG$
    Good job. I didnt enjoy it at first cuz its slow.
    What a nice and thoughtful reply.
    I'm sure you read this.
    I can tell from your spectacular comontary.

    This was nice. I like the way you put words together. The story was ill. That sounds like something that could happen in my houshold. It really makes you appreciate family. Even the ones that annoy you sometimes. This was worth the read. Keep up the good work. I'll be watching for you.
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    upin..............................

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    nice work...well thought out...words meaningful...
    basically a nioce piece.....not mmuch more to say

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    tight shit like the story telling style of u man. been looking for peeps like dat u know.keep it up

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    your first link was a link to your own piece.
    don't try to fuck us over in the future, thanks.
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    ^ ahh shit ... how am I trying to fuck you over? I reply to like 7-8 open mics a day,.... and i make one mistake .. am trying to "fuck you over".....

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