10 lines due tonite..Blind spit?? don't matter to me..Answer in your check in and i'll start keyin it up after you checked in..
~1~
10 lines due tonite..Blind spit?? don't matter to me..Answer in your check in and i'll start keyin it up after you checked in..
~1~
checkin. you can go first. but change it so its due tomorrow at least. i don't like deadlines. alright. i won't feed. good luck. peace
Ayo..
Got yourself singled out..your 'chips are low'..looks like Ace is all 'pringled out'..
I left your 'rhymes to dry'..your verses aren't public speeches, they're 'wrinkled shouts'..
No since of even postin..my punches have legends quotin'..why try to match up..
This isn't a card game for candy..this is a race for votes and you need to catch up..
Cuz i'll treat this 'ace like a common casino'..and 'pass him around to the highest bid'..
Kid..you aint that big..come out your home..i'll show you how prisoners in riots live..
This ace of spades and showin no stealth..if so..then why's his crew himself kid..
I've 'handled you delicately'..it's true that tha 'last of the aces have been dealth with'..
Your face to me is an air-strip..and out of the planes i threw..i landed more then a few..
Whoa!! take it easy faggot.. i'm only grabbing your ass too hand it too you..
Check It...
By creating ya name, you already predicted the result of this attack
Cuz its obvious that a "lost" is wut you have and a win is wut u lack
Clip stitches to ur words and ur verse still wouldn't connect its senses
Cuz like a gap without a bridge, yourr lyrics are just absented fences
Finish Him...
I've inflicted more agony to you than syphilis to your brain at a glance
So with that fact already stated, imagine what I can do with my hands
Like an ant tryin to defy gravity, u aren't even elevatin past the ground
Took me awhile to figure how ya got ur lyrics till i saw u harass that clown
You must've been talkin bout ur winnin' rec in ur sig cuz now its not around
This reminds me of 'Amazing Grace' considering your 'lost' has been found
vote on this plz. we'll be glad to vote fairly on a battle of yours.
thank you.
peace
word to that^......blah
its not that hard to vote. thanx
pz
punches .. .. . . . .goes to Ace had them directed better and made sense.. ..
personals.. .. . . . .hmmm goes to Ace had them on a better level than lost.. ..
meta//...... ......goes to Ace and ya no y.. ..has a better understanding of them.......... ..........
create.. .... ..both were kinda the same attempt but Ace has his placed more to the mindframe of vet..... .....
multi.. ..both had some multis but i liked Aces more on a level that the were original in a sense............ ............
structure//... ...goes to Ace even though both had strecthed lines... ...
wordplay...... ......has to be sort of tie but i liked Aces werdplay more.. ..
rhymescene... ...goes to Ace.. ..but lost...had some direct ones too.. ..
injoyment...Ace...lost soul needs to elavate and make his shit more direct and more witty and not so long bars cuz it cuts the flow quality.. ..
vote/Ace of A..... .....
hit my battles up wit the alias THING if you have some time dogg
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good battle
fav line from lost:
good rhyme in this one, good punch tooOriginally Posted by l0st soul
overall, your rhymescheme is what you were strong in, in this. Punches were good and wordplay was ok.
fav quote from ace:
desent personal, good wordplay
overall, your punches were ok, had more personals, but rhmescheme was kept basic.
Do more than just at the end of your lines.
breakdown:
flow: ace
rhymescheme: lost
punches: tie
wordplay: lost
personals: ace
metas: lost
structure: tie
v/ lost
no hate, my honest opinion...
if u could please return fav, good battle guys
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^thanx for voting peepz. i'll hit those up if i can find them
leaving links would be much easier though.
pz
OK...Both came a lil stretched....But Ima give this one to Ace
Lost Soul...I think you tried too hard...some words you seem to have thrown in there jus to complete a multi or to make a rhyme...Punches seemed forced...You had a few alright personals and punches...but not enough...Also had some filler and played rhymes...Not a bad battle tho
Ace....you came good...the 'Check It' and 'Finish Him' was stupid...but other than that...I think you took this battle with your punches and personals...you came pretty original...still ahd a played rhyme or two...but you came more consistent and that got you the win...
Please drop an HONEST vote here guys...Would appreciated it if you read the verses and not jus followed other votes...thanks http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113978
A few achievements here and there
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Lol...NOOOOOOOO thats where you guys are wrong..filler is very very uncommon in my verses forced..ehh..maybe but never filler..& to say i have filler and ace doesn't...that's hypocritical ask me if ya want me to point them out for ya descent battle ace..but if i was on my feet and back on track...well if all that happened we wouldn't of even battled lol..if you catch my drift..^&^
~1~
^yeah i know wut you mean. nice battle though.
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Got yourself singled out..your 'chips are low'..looks like Ace is all 'pringled out'..
I left your 'rhymes to dry'..your verses aren't public speeches, they're 'wrinkled shouts'..
^^didn't like this at all...tried to be creative and didn't end up punchin
No since of even postin..my punches have legends quotin'..why try to match up..
This isn't a card game for candy..this is a race for votes and you need to catch up..
^^i take it you typo'd on 'sense'...whatever...kinda tried personal and it fell a little flat
Cuz i'll treat this 'ace like a common casino'..and 'pass him around to the highest bid'..
Kid..you aint that big..come out your home..i'll show you how prisoners in riots live..
^^first line was ok... but you didn't bring the punch home on the 2nd
This ace of spades and showin no stealth..if so..then why's his crew himself kid..
I've 'handled you delicately'..it's true that tha 'last of the aces have been dealth with'..
^^not bad wordplay...but i feel your reaching for the punch
Your face to me is an air-strip..and out of the planes i threw..i landed more then a few..
Whoa!! take it easy faggot.. i'm only grabbing your ass too hand it too you..
^^ok close... nothing special cuz i feel the phrasing in the first line is awkward
Check It...
By creating ya name, you already predicted the result of this attack
Cuz its obvious that a "lost" is wut you have and a win is wut u lack
^^meh...this has prolly been done a few times already in his battles...
Clip stitches to ur words and ur verse still wouldn't connect its senses
Cuz like a gap without a bridge, yourr lyrics are just absented fences
^^blah...this was really bad phrasing.. n no punch here that connected...
Finish Him...
I've inflicted more agony to you than syphilis to your brain at a glance
So with that fact already stated, imagine what I can do with my hands
^^filler... all i have to say...
Like an ant tryin to defy gravity, u aren't even elevatin past the ground
Took me awhile to figure how ya got ur lyrics till i saw u harass that clown
^^I like both lines...but they don't complement.. but whatever...
You must've been talkin bout ur winnin' rec in ur sig cuz now its not around
This reminds me of 'Amazing Grace' considering your 'lost' has been found
^^good close... better than his at least...
I expected more from both of you... this was close but it should have been on a higher level... both of you could increase complexity and mulitis... vocab was average... gonna give this to Ace cuz i got tired of the card lines from Lost...
vote = Ace
plz return an honest vote on the links in my sig... i always return the favour
Hence Forward
I gotta give this one to Ace
Lost soul started weak and ended weak, but had a little spike in the middle.
and his rhyme sceme was hard to find. Most of his muti-sylabul rhymes just didnt sound right in my opinion.
I liked Ace's start to end and thought it flowed better with the rhyme scheme. Ace's meta's were tight too .. my favorate part was with the clown, that shit had me rollin'
Vote=Ace
Hope this is good enough.
^thanx. uppin for more.......
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pz
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