this it
20 bar
old school
no hate
no recycling
no biting
just keep it stright
][\/][.o.lB
Doc.t theSandGod
this it
20 bar
old school
no hate
no recycling
no biting
just keep it stright
hit this up before you spit
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=117406
And 20 bars is 40 lines
ppl will not wana read that much kid
Lets make it 12 lines max since were spittin tonite
Peace It
12 lines
keep it inform,what ever you are you wont it make far
your gonna get wimped like a leashed retart in a dog park
i dont understand you name even your game is a confusin
][\/][.o.lb the fuck is that,what are you stupid
what ever you doing,your runnin my patince
i can tell your fan of the matrix,so face it
your in the real world and your a real girl
ready to get hurled to the surface
trust me,everybody know that your mind aint perfect
so listen to me just go to church kid
since your life is uncertain and curvin while the earth is turnin
til your whole soul start burnin and learnin that your a weak person.
Ok, hit up my other battle fairly dont forget!
Heres my verse
Y'd u except? u've lost ur mind like Inhalin too much Lead
You suck like Teeth being used and giving some bad Head
I give you absolutely no props like Mimes actin on Stage
I'll ruin u like novel books when turning to the Last Page
This bitch squats to pee, Now Im about to Kill Her
Do u get many Cavities? Cuz all ur lines are Fillers
So Lay off the sweets dude, your facin Tooth Decay
Stealin my inhalers the only way u could take my Breath Away
I aint a slut this wont go easy like ur first battle Did
Doc is in a crew? Terri fox wouldnt run with this Kid
Like Womens Facial Treatment this battle is a Wrap
This kid is almost nuthing, He's Hawai on a World Map
U just lost, thats what happens when do things ur bad In
I DAM this bitch this hell, like Beavers comittin Bad Sins
lol
that shit is tight kid
lol
you lost me in beginning but it was tight
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uppin............................................. ...................................
lol...blah...
Mob came better here...both are aight for new dudes i guess....
but still weak ....MoB punches were
just a bit better....thats waht decided this match..peace..
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lol weak punches?
lol ok
uppin............................................. ...........................
savir ur an idiot who thinks cuz u got a bunch of posts that new people arent good...this was a good battle
fav line from doc.t
made me laugh, again, coulda been worded better.Originally Posted by doc.t thesandgod
overall, u got good potential, but up ur wordplay. You got funny punches and rhyme skills r good but up your structure/wordplay. Keep lines even, keep the flow steddy
fav line from mob:
made me laugh, good meta, worded good[\/][.O.lB]Like Womens Facial Treatment this battle is a Wrap
This kid is almost nuthing, He's Hawai on a World Map
overall, good structure, kept the flow goin. nice wordplay and ok punches. didnt c any personals.
breakdown:
flow: mob
structure: mob
personals: doc.t
punches: doc.t
metas: mob
rhymescheme: doc.t
wordplay: mob
overall, mob took this a bit more with better structure, wordplay, and metas. Advice for you doc.t, no hate but just up your flow man. Keep it flowin together. Keep lines even. The words in between the punches are important too.
v/mob
no hate, honest opnion, good battle guys
return fav. if u can
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ayo, doc.t no hate that i voted against you 2 times, i dont got nothin against you, you know? dont wanna start any beef or anything, jus so you know
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lol oh man sum1 vote .................................................. ...............sleep walkerss..................i hate startin up at RB again frum scratch!
^since when are you back here?.......................
Go Red Wings
Doc-
keep it inform,what ever you are you wont it make far
your gonna get wimped like a leashed retart in a dog park
heh.....decent line...no hard punch but got me to chuckle
i dont understand you name even your game is a confusin
][\/][.o.lb the fuck is that,what are you stupid
this was pretty bad...you need a punch...and better wording
what ever you doing,your runnin my patince
i can tell your fan of the matrix,so face it
eeehhhh.......didn't really like this...stretch it a bit....not too much..just to make it flow right
your in the real world and your a real girl
ready to get hurled to the surface
trust me,everybody know that your mind aint perfect
so listen to me just go to church kid
since your life is uncertain and curvin while the earth is turnin
til your whole soul start burnin and learnin that your a weak person
I quoted this whole piece by itself cuz I couldn't get your flow........punches were weak
][\/][.O.lB-
Y'd u except? u've lost ur mind like Inhalin too much Lead
You suck like Teeth being used and giving some bad Head
decent
I give you absolutely no props like Mimes actin on Stage
I'll ruin u like novel books when turning to the Last Page
played....
This bitch squats to pee, Now Im about to Kill Her
Do u get many Cavities? Cuz all ur lines are Fillers
lol....as played as this might seem I haven't seen this before I don't think...good call on this one....
So Lay off the sweets dude, your facin Tooth Decay
Stealin my inhalers the only way u could take my Breath Away
very played
I aint a slut this wont go easy like ur first battle Did
Doc is in a crew? Terri fox wouldnt run with this Kid
weak...
Like Womens Facial Treatment this battle is a Wrap
This kid is almost nuthing, He's Hawai on a World Map
omg....cmon man this is older than like rap itself
U just lost, thats what happens when do things ur bad In
I DAM this bitch this hell, like Beavers comittin Bad Sins
played
Overall-I gotta decide between the weak verse and the played verse, something I do not really like doing. I felt both could come much better. You guys need to add more multis and make your punches hit harder. Also, do not waste your setups. They are there for a purpose. Anyways, back to voting. I can't really decide cuz both verses were weak...but each verse had one decent line. So I base my vote on who had the better of the two decent lines. So even though I did not enjoy this battle I gotta give my vote to........
Vote:MOB
Go Red Wings
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