Writing (Keystyle)

[SMZ]

Haven't been in the mood lately - so I'm just trying to get the juices flowing - hopefully I'll have something ready tomorrow.

Writing - a life forming essence,
lets me bask in the presence, of par excellence,
thru divine elements,
and sift through my mind’s sediments,
Dropping rhymes filled with knowledge,
reprint my minds thought collage,
upon yours, to open forgotten doors,
with melodious roars,
and remove accumulated dust, give sonic oil to mental rust,
and then formulate lust, for the true and just,
amongst all of us, and this I must,

- I’d rather I bust,
my heart from sorrow,
before I ever start tomorrow,
with self-imposed guilt,
from only showing my hilt,
without baring blade, as I have been bade,
by him who made, all things that are portrayed,
through eyes to brain organ,
the minds piano now will rise and start formin’,
spit pourin’, into air and forum,
until even foreign,
weathercasters say it’s stormin’,
observing masters of the art and learnin’,
then doing my part to keep the fire burnin’,
in others still,
for something real… bleh.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...759post1215759
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...769post1215769

[Dice-All/Tec]

now see i like this nice structure, tight message, im feelin good free nigga

[FreeThinker]

SMZ this was ok... i can see your in a block! Iv read a lot better from you.. it flowed ok and vocab wasnt to bad .. Your sturucture could use a bit of work however... i mean the message was coming to me.. but could have been stronger... keep dropin

[Mistral]

Yeah this was alright here....The structure in this was alright....The flow was ok, it got choppy at some parts....Vocab in this was good I thought....The content was ok, it could have been a bit better I thought....but overall this was alright...keep at it.

[Penskills]

A decent piece for a key..but I have read better from you in your last few posts..so I must say...not impressed... ...I think you are better than this...
Peace..